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AGE:
45
LOC: Elk Grove Village, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 11
LOC: Elk Grove Village, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 11
I am a writer at heart who spent 8 years in the U.S. Navy and 8 years in software services before I tackled my first novel, Little Woods. I built a website to promote my work:
www.Avicorcho.com
Little Woods can be purchased through:
Amazon.com,
Barnes and Noble.com,
BooksAMillion.com,
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Version 1
76 Reviews
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Darkness inside, fog outside, regret everywhere.
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Version 2
39 Reviews
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Elk Grove Village, Illinois, 5/5/2008 Publisher iUniverse, Inc., the leading provider of publishing technology solutions for authors, announces the release and Publisher’s Choice designation of Little Woods by Steve Campbell. Little Woods is an action novel set in the Chicago area that follows the story of Native Americans, in the year 1833, amidst the aftermath of the Black Hawk War, the official incorporation of Chicago as an American town, and the forfeiture of native land rights through t...
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Elk Grove Village, Illinois, 5/5/2008 Publisher iUniverse, Inc., the leading provider of publishing technology solutions for authors, announces the release and Publisher’s Choice designation of Little Woods by Steve Campbell, an action novel set in the Chicago area that follows the story of Native Americans, in the year 1833, amidst the aftermath of the Black Hawk War, the official incorporation of Chicago as an American town, and the forfeiture of native land rights through Treaty of Chicago...
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Version 2
5 Reviews
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Foreword The fictional story of Little Woods is a work of entertainment that I hope will provide readers with the genesis of contemplation of the repetitive nature of history and how the evolution of the 21st-century world governance is following a similar pattern as the developing governance of the United States in the 19th century. This novel might be categorically themed as the “local effects of globalization” and is the first of three planned manuscripts, each expanding in the scope of th...
Version 1
9 Reviews
11 Comments
The fictional story of Little Woods is entertainment that I hope will provide readers with a contemplation of the repetitive nature of history and how the evolution of the 21st-century world governance is following a similar pattern to the development of governance of the United States in the 19th century. This novel might be categorically themed as the “local effects of globalization” and is the first of three planned, each expanding in the scope of that theme. At no time should any reader ...
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Your writing craft is solid. The characters are slightly unlikable, but I’m interested to see where this story goes. Here are my humble suggestions: The indecision about what to drink seemed out of place. You told us he needed a really big drink. I would go with whiskey in a high-ball glass right away, and specify the brand. It’s decisive and demonstrates male maturity. Then you can use his handling of the whiskey glass to show his emotions (impatience, anxiety, irritation, etc.) and omit the...
This is good, but too short for much feedback. The first-person POV brought me close to the story and I wanted to read the next line. My one humble suggestion has to do with "...why I do what I do." I think this character would have a name for his primary activity. Some names come immediately to mind: "...why I harvest," "...why I scythe." (Too obvious?) “Red Rum” is an anagram for the word “murder.” So, he could say “…why I love red rum. Nice work so far.
I come away from this piece with a hazier definition of truth than when I started. The way you try to employ the term “truth” is compelling at first, but then becomes vague and exasperating. Maybe instead of “truth” you are talking about “freedom,” which could be defined as liberty or comfort depending on a person’s outlook. At the moment, I think most people view “truth” in politics as something that can be confirmed through factcheck.com.
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Enticing. Saint Jude is the patron saint of policemen and lost causes. This is a very creative piece with nice tension and unexpected turns of fate. My one humble suggestion is that you review your use of pronouns. Example: “…office staff had given him…” Change “him” to “John” or it sounds like the office staff gave the watch to the fish. Really nice work.
I think you've created a very good antagonist here. My one suggestion is to allow the commanders to dictate some insidious military action. Ex: "Float little rafts with bowls of cooked meat into the swamp where the electrified coils were laid. That'll attract the children. When the mothers rush in to pull their brats from harm's way, close the circuit." Good work.
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