I like the humor and honesty in this. I don't know why you wrote it, but I don't really need to. I like the fact that it is all questions.

In the first two lines "You care not for me, I care not for you ... I don't care what you do." I think these should all share the same structure. I am not a particular fan of "care not" but if you use it, I think the last one should also be "I care not what you do." Just for consistency. It's sad you see friendships as walls of glass, but it's good imagery. "Demise for all who know me, is coming, it won't be long" This line bothers me. I like "vengeance ignites the fires" but I'm not sure why...

I don't like the idea of "hearing" silence, but I like your concept. I would prefer to read "recognize" or something like that. I really enjoy your point to embrace silence, but what's indivisible about it? At the same time, I enjoy this idea as well. The thought that silence cannot be broken or that it shouldn't. Maybe this is what confuses me. Is silence itself indivisible or should we allow it to be maintained? Anyway, I enjoy your short story but think a couple of things could be changed.

There seems to be an enticing cryptic message here that brings me into your story, however, I would also like to know what you mean (if anything.)(I'd assume you meant something since you write. I'd like to know what it is.)

I really enjoy this poem. There are a few things that I think can be changed for better, but overall good job. In the first stanza, line four, I don't like the rhyme "again" because it feels like while we're returning somewhere, we don't know where. It seems inconsistent to me. suggestion: "...where you'll be sent."? Fourth stanza, second line, I think you can leave out "just" unless you like it. I don't feel it serves any purpose. Perhaps rhythm, but don't fall victim to that. But in the las...

I love the opening imagery, but it's lost and you're suddenly in a laboratory. I wish you would continue the first. I don't understand why you break up the lines how you do, but I suppose that may not be of too much importance. Or it could be quite important. Should "Agency gathered intelligence" be "Agency-gathered intelligence"? Overall this is good but doesn't pop out at me or make me want to contemplate anything, which isn't necessarily necessary in poetry, but I like to be challenged, no...

The wording of the first sentence after the list seems like can be improved. I know what you mean, but it sounds like these items would go in her trash. It's quickly clarified in the second half of the sentence, but is there a better way to word it? Any other lack of clarity came from my own limited vocabulary. This is truly great. I was most disappointed when I got to "pe" and there was nothing more. I look forward to reading further as it comes!

This is great. The fact that the original price was less than 15 for a soul makes me laugh. Good humor. "on Sale" is better than if you said "for Sale" so keep that.