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AGE: 43
LOC: Rochester, MN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 16

I am a deeply introspective person who thinks she has a story to tell-dont we all?  I value above everything else the connections I form with people.  I appreciate the opportunity to practice my story telling in a public-yet-somewhat-(emotionally)safe venue.  Tell me if my story touches you in any way-

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We're late. Jon is already anticipating the dirty look he's going to get from Amy. The screams assault us as we open the door. We shuffle through the entrance like cattle as the sixteen year old at the door stamps our hands. We find out later that this identifies us with our kids so we cant leave without them. I can see how that might happen. The large warehouse is painted white with red accents. Tables everywhere are crowded with parents and excitable children. Add a couple of arcade games,...
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I'm in therapy again. Crap. I didnt even see it coming. I was only going in for advice to help a family member (really). As I am telling the psychologist about the situation, it suddenly dawns on me. "Why does everyone in my life need therapy?" with tears coming to the surface. The expression on her face startles me. "Maybe that's what we really need to talk about". "But I'm happy, I'm over all that. I'm just trying to help someone else this time". "See you next week" she says. Recovering fro...
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Your character develpment is amazing. I can see exactly how his life circumstances lead to his personal version of right and wrong. He isnt completely lost though, he is traumatized by killing someone. He does want to be "good" and he does have dreams for the future. He is drawn to good people who can help him. And then there is the last sentence which says that there is much more to come, and the anxiety of knowing what he is capable of. I love this story, I wish I could offer some construct...
Short Story / Tenderloin
so far so good. I can see where this is going. Very homoerotic. Why did he scream his order?
Novel Treatments / Remembering the crash
AWESOME! I was completely sucked into the story-I want to read the whole thing. Very descriptive, I could see the scene exactly. Its such a disturbing memory, I wonder how this person moves on-
Short Story / TEST ITEM - IGNORE
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