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It's often been said that ignorance is bliss, but I submit that bliss is ignorance, for in order to be truly, blissfully happy, one must be ignorant of the world as it really is.
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Do you ever defy gravity, when no one is around? Or wonder why the laws of nature, only seem to bring you down? Can you count the stars at midnight, and join them in the dawn? Can you answer all these questions, I been asking for so long. Good mornin' America, how are ya? Say don't you know me, I'm your native son. I'm the child you bore and then forgot, grew up in a parking lot, but I know what you do not, For I can defy gravity when no one is around. I can taste the moon and stars and never...
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Novel Treatments / Old Soldiers Never Die
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Chapter II: The Innocents Abroad The morning after his father’s body was found, Daniel Larkin knocked on our door a few minutes after dawn. I had hardly been able to sleep better than him, so I was lying awake and heard his gentle rapping. “Come in,” I said, moved by his red eyes and tear-stained face. “Couldn’t sleep,” he muttered, moving over to the kitchen table and taking a seat. “I understand, Daniel” I poured the two of us some tea and sat down at the other end of the table. Daniel just...
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Tell us What You Know – Or We’ll Kill You The 9/11 victims and family members who are testifying in the sentencing of Zacarias Moussaoui have produced some amazing, moving scenes that have brought tears to the eyes of almost everyone who has paid attention. The widows, the mothers, the sons, and the survivors will have to relive that day for the rest of their lives, and maybe the rest of us should think about it more often. But this sentimental parade is misguided in this case. Zacarias Mous...
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When a man says "I think," it means he doesn't know; but when he says "I know," it means he doesn't think.
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Poetry / Voyeurism
This is pretty good, I don't think the comparison has to be explained, I got it without the notes. I would get rid of the word say and the colon and just make it "my white blood cells pray the slash isn't extensive." Also I think it is spelled hierarch... I do like that word choice though. good stuff overall.
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This is a very moving subject and it is well-written and interesting. The uncertainty and pain of Amanda are clear, though I find Justin's character a little harder to wrap my head around. If he really got drunk, got her pregnant, and ignored her for 9 months, then we need to see some kind of conflict within him or with Amanda. Also I think maybe it should start with the parents leaving... we need to see that scene in order to accept the idea that someone would leave their pregnant daughter a...
Interesting open -- at the end of the first part, the tense is messed up -- it should be "she _has_ only slept three days a week since I've known her". Is Ed really 68, since narrator was only seven 13 years ago. It's the "Berenstain" bears, though I have to say I found that line great. In fact the part where you first meet her is very well done. The letter from her mom is quite moving as well. Overall you have a decent start and a good basis for Will's character. We don't really know anythin...
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Hmm I think the first step in taking this farther would be to clean up the grammar and punctuation in what you have. I also think you need more actual dialogue between the narrator and Staci. I do like the way you describe the office and the way Michelle plays the game of being the good employee. It's worth carrying on.
Non-fiction / Spring
This is an interesting piece which clearly brings out the deep feelings of isolation you feel. I think it is well-written overall, but it needs more to really move me.
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