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AGE: 51
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 03

I used to be a respiratory therapist, at present I’m just a bum dreaming of making big scores in the penny stock market.  I mostly write poetry, and would like to extend into short stories.

The fact that I have not had a decent orgasm or bowel movement in weeks may either add fuel to the creative fire or send me trembling and conciliatory to the nearest E.R. or hydrotherapy center.

P.S. I believe in medical marijuana, and medical prostitution…

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Poetry / War
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War, Like the best encryption software, Scrambles physiology's order and meaning Into splattered Pollocks of veins and tendons, Leaving God to wonder How it will decode this gristle-hash, into the lost message of the soul.
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Poetry / ABCDEFG
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That crematory spike of light, Day nails through The magnifying glass, crucifries the ant scuttling over stone, And smoke skeins Rise from its tiny black thorax The way Kleenex greets the noses Of widows. I confess I feel Godlike Turning out insect bodies born with crunchy armor into the populace of air, Even without the grieving Over the black mouths of graves, Something very special Happens to the ego To those who turn destiny Like a switch to off…  
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Nobody believes in life Before death. Our gig of thorns and strife Aspires to dust. This is where The faith is needed. This singular affair Is more than nothing; our meat Is not just nows clothing , I repeat: There is more evidence for us, Than in the God we trust. Let the passe tomes of metaphysics, Pass like dumb romantic flicks. Let the neighbors wired, yapping demons Wake us like a tongue surfing on lemons. In pains crowing cock bloomed defeated Christ, We come to be because our flesh is...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / the mind of a dagger
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I have had this conversation innumerable times with the Israeli ass-kissers, and it starts out something like this:" What do you expect the Israelis to do? Sure they are killing civilians in their attempt to quell mortar and rocket attacks on their civilian population, but its Hamas and the others who are cynically utilizing human shields in attempts to gain world support and sympathies....what do you expect them to do???" I always find this response extremely interesting, as though...
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Poetry / War
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War, Like the best encryption software, Scrambles physiologies order and meaning Into Jackson Pollocks of veins and tendons, Leaving death to wonder How it will hack into this gristle-hash Of loves failed agenda To monitor the lost message of soul…  
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Some might say your have run on sentences in most stanzas, so punctuate! But I have a feeling this is a spoken word poem? To be spoken out loud with booming voice and great enthusiasm, maybe as a preacher giving the final gospel about poetry's muse. It might be interesting to have a second part discussing the leveling effect of too many writing seminars, and too many M.F.A.'s. Sort of a warning to the wise. I enjoyed this
Poetry / Remember Most
Be very careful how you end your lines; do not let words like "said" dangle at the line break-they are emphasized that way. Maybe condense the first two lines into "I remember clearly when my late husband...first found out..." I think it would add greatly to the poem if you gave some specific physical details of how your husband looked upon learning the news; specidfic details about his eyes or facial expression. Too many generalities diffuse the sentiment... good luck
Poetry / Elephant
There are some good lines here, but almost every stanza could be the jumping off point for a completely separate poem. Don't be a mile wide and an inch deep; go back to the metaphor of the elephant and concentrate on that exclusively-you don't want any poem to appear to be an exhaustive survey of all possible psychological states. Stick to a few details and elaborate... Think purely in terms of EDITING at this stage good luck
Poetry / Jealous
I have a feeling you don't like this person too well! I think you should amp up your verbal assault-make the metaphors more personal-maybe describe in detail just what damage she has done;spell it out. Instead of "pretty little angel" how about "rabid pit bull posing as a lamb?" "where you see halos I see horns" instead "where you see red lips; I see foaming teeth"...Make it more visceral and descriptive with more bite... If you feel this strongly, you need to let us know without holding back...
Poetry / Montana Mowed
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