This is very enjoyable. It something like a scene in a movie. Not much happens but it is this simplicity that makes it so beautiful. "we us to talk about hopping" I think you wanted to say "we used to"?

Your inclination towards poetry is quite obvious at least in the beginning of this piece because it is very descriptive and lyrical. I was waiting for something to happen and it did in the end and it surprised me in a very pleasant way. Basically this short story is good but you left me wanting a bit more. You should definitely think about continuing it. Tell us more about this couple, about her because she seems pretty interesting. Why did she do that? Did they stay together?

It is more like a flash fiction than a short story and I think it would work better as an introduction to your future book. I couldn't help but notice that the description of the mother is very touchy and well constructed. Maybe you should extend it a bit and let us read one of the father too.

So, this is not exactly a short story. It is maybe a dialog from a short story. I would have liked to see an introductive passage of some sort. Still the good thing is that you managed somehow to tell us something about the characters through their discussion. The ending needs a bit of work too. It just ends too sudden. The voice of the narrator is appearing too soon and it is too short.

This appears to me as some sort of a road story if such genre exists. I liked it overall because it has some dynamism that I feel it just fits right in it. Still it is too short. You should develop it further. just as I started getting used to it, as it grew on me it ended. That's a shame.

First of all I would like to say that I think it was a great effort from your part. It is very intelligently written and your easiness with which you wrote seems obvious. Still, for me at least, it was too sci at less fi. Too many scientific details blurred the story line and I found it a little bit difficult to read. Overall a good piece of writing.

For a Warcraft inspired poem I found this to be pretty good. I paid good attention to the last two lines but I think they are ok still the most superficial of them all. The other stanzas are better constructed

Really appreciate the effort to find the words that rhyme so well. But it might be a bit too much rhyme in there. So much that it reads like something a 14 year old would write. It is just too childish. You should let go of some words that rhyme and make it more cult and serious. The "love" theme doesn't help either. You should dig deeper into the love thing. Find stuff that hasn't been told before in a poem. Talk more about your perspective on this feeling.

I think love is a theme so common. Many have used it in their poems or novels and not so many succeeded to comprise all the aspect or one for that matter. But your writing falls in the category of those that did a very decent job with it. Really good effort of writing this because it is so extended and evolved. And I think it works just great.

You are true about rhyming poetry that somehow it seems more naive are not so lyrical. Still you did a very good job with it and managed to express everything just right. I mean there are some mature feelings and opinions expressed there very coherently. Good job