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AGE: 22
LOC: Hawthorne, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 16

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Poetry / Jared Bird
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Why not become a pretty tarnished silver string And hang from it our aged charms and rusted keys Why not become wild poppies And dance on Turkish leaves Let's become Arabian lovers We'll have love affairs under desert palm trees I want to be solid, cool and you, the woods persistent wind
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Poetry / Blind and Stupid
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You would have your way with me Plunging you fingers into my skin Searching to fulfill a longing sexual fantasy I would gladly welcome you Using your surrender to my advantage Manipulating the situation So that I penetrate you So that I release myself into you Leaving you with the residue of my imperfection It will spread inside of you Making your insides die You’ll feel the filth work against you Quickly crippling you Eventually dissolving you It will make its way from your remains Back into...
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There doesn’t seem to be any reasoning behind your actions There really isn’t much logic to justify your stupidity I could advise you But I know better You would find it distasteful You would put it to waste I watch you now with little amusement Finding myself overwhelmed with pity, for you. I know where you’re stumbling to, pretty head. Setting yourself up for degradation. And I could warn you, but I know the outcome, You would throw my warning away. I could blame so many people for your mis...
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Poetry / Staying Dirty
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Refusing vigorously Violently protesting I will not forgive Choosing to leave behind divinity Having no concern with saving the soul Slouching and plotting and sinning I will not repent I hate; it is my humanity I lie; it has become a habit When I start to believe that I’ve found it inside of me, I realize I am too late It has long ago withered away I can’t, I won’t give in! Finding myself useless in this containment Too much is being felt, thought, said… I cannot be held back by these layers...
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Poetry / Cake
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It’s like cake More then you can see The lines The smell The taste of you and me I’m soft and bitter, some of my best qualities I’ve been told You’re overbearing but you remember so well, I haven’t forgotten, no. The sweet cream of a long over due fuck The tart taste of eating far too much In our haste we saver nothing It’s so much like cake
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This piece has great imagery and a wickedly wonderful concept but it could use some improving. For example, second to last line 'An leave nothing' I suppose you meant 'And'. Secondly, your ending doesn't flow with the rest of your poem. Perhaps you could try joining the last two lines of the poem and delete the word 'the', try it out and see how you like it. Otherwise, great piece!
Beautiful metaphors. The piece has a wonderfully natural flow. I felt like I was following the speaker around as the scene changes but still they listen. It is a lovely read and I believe it works beautifully.
Poetry / The Day After
I enjoyed the poem; it's short but has all the components of a good piece of writing. I don’t much fancy the title though; I think it should reflect the elements of the piece as a whole more.
Poetry / Learning to fly
Beautiful! Your lines are clean, not cluttered with unnecessary wording. One can see and feel the full meaning of flying this kite and a real sense of ease in a state of tension shines through.
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I feel it's a little repetitive and it drags a little, but other wise you get your message across beautifully. Stanza I favored the most is the fourth, perfect imagry.
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