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AGE:
41
LOC: Portsmouth, NH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 15
LOC: Portsmouth, NH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 15
I write marketing copy in corporate America by day, and chip away at my fictional manuscript by night. I’m still stuck with writer’s block even after taking several months off from my manuscript… and, I’ve started grad school so now I’m really crunched for time. I’ll try to post some excerpts when I can. It’s been a neat experience out here, and thanks to all who responded to my posts. And… good luck to all with your writing projects! ~Ann
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Dreams of "next Hemingway" rudely awakened.
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My poet's soul chose corporate America.
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Still unpublished on Urbis. Interested, SMITH?
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Religions unite. One God made all.
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I hear the doorbell downstairs, and glance at the clock on my laptop screen. Seven o’clock on the nose. Exactly when he said he’d be by to pay off the remaining four months of his lease obligation. I always liked Tom. He’s so much easier on my nerves than that shrew he got tied down with. My God, what did he ever see in her? I shut off my computer in the office and pad down the stairs in my slippers to the front door. "Hi Tom, come on in." I step aside, and the December air rudely sweeps in b...
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The snippets of dialogue are great! I think you should add more because it really gives this piece wonderful color. You hit the dialect on the head -- I felt like I was sitting in the bar with you listening to Dirk. Really liked "bay-beh." Maybe you can capitalize BAY to really underscore his singsong delivery. I had a bit of trouble with the "bluebloods" reference. I guess I found it hard to picture the New Orleans uppercrust and filthy rich families uttering the phrase "I'm a holla atcha." ...
Pitch-perfect! It's true... it's concise... it's funny. Great submission for the SMITH six-word contest on the creative life. Just change one thing: add an apostrophe to "Life's" and you'll be good to go.
How true! You came up with a solid definition of writer's block in six well-chosen words. Kudos. I'd hypenate "half-written"... other than that, I think this is a great entry for the SMITH contest.
I really like the juxtaposition of high and low in the first two lines... that completely captures the spirit of the poem, and sums up his holier-than-thou stance. The mixed use of upper and lowercases throws me off a little. I'd standardize on one or the other -- either all initial caps, or all lowercase. If you ripped this off quickly just to vent, good work on the fly!
I thoroughly enjoyed this! The dialect is wonderful, I felt like I was transported to Appalachia. There is almost nothing I would change about this... just one observation for your consideration: I tripped a little on "Stricken with thought"... I think because "stricken" conjures up for me someone who is very frightened (stricken with fear). Randy is clearly a strong, bold character so to visualize him fearful seems out of place. How about "Pausing deliberately at the doorway, he popped the t...
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