I enjoyed this. The constant periods were slightly annoying, as well as the fragments. But other than that, it was really good! Clean it up a bit, and it will be great!

I really like this. I loved all the description, and there really isn't much that I would change! Soory if this doesn't help :(

I would watch the grammer, and maybe use a thersaurus (sp?) but other than that, I really liked it!

I liked it a great deal, but it was missing something if you know what I mean. I enjoyed it, but I think you should just edit the last line some... I think it would greatly improve overall. But I really liked it! It was sad...

The description was very poetic and beautiful, and I recevied a wonderful image in my mind. However, with each individual paragraph I received a different image completely. It didn't really blend together, if you know what I mean. It seems a little choppy. I hope that makes sense...