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AGE: 35
LOC: Toledo, OH
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 31

Yung and Restless midwest poet trying to get my poetry to the next level.

Highly influenced by Spoken Word, Sci Fi, and Mysteries.

Favorite authors: Willie Perdomo, Sharon Olds, Etheridge Knight, Octavia Butler, Walter Mosley

Guilty Pleasure: slowly becoming a quasi-sneaker freak

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Black Bird behind bulletproof glass allow me to introduce myself I am a poet not a rapper although I write good rhymes and the story of my life is the episode of good times. I am on the grind mashing these words to paper trying to make the ends meet trying to make this shit make sense. Black Bird behind bulletproof glass allow me to introduce myself I am a poet a champion of the human lexicon I am to words what Harriet Tubman was to slaves You see, words are free spirits that you can’t take b...
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Rhonda "Rhonnie" Blackshear has a shrine to Little K.I.M. on the south side wall of her bedroom she looks more like the Junior Mafia Little K.I.M. than the Versace Little K.I.M. and her body was built by Romare Bearden she carries the Moody Manor in her ass she carries the face of an Olmec Diety on her shoulders she carries her broken virginity around her neck like an iced out record label logo ****** Rhonnie was blessed at an early age with her mother's breasts with nipples like sports bott...
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the breeze carried her scent ten steps ahead dressed in Las Vegas orange with my nose to the air I ask, "What's the special occasion?" "Saturday," she says "I took the day off as my religious obligation to warm the cold side of every downtown building and memorial edifice" I, being the bronzed fallen soldier that I am, could feel my bitter body lean into her gavitational pull my 10 am shadow stretched his hands to her while I stood behind the register set in russet stone
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I am a monster a dragon enslaved by the river a leviathan breathing water like a kissing cousin so the allegations of my demise weighed down by the water and darkness have been grossly exaggerated in the rhymes of school girls in the vericose veins of church whores my progeny survives, thrives in the black ...
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Poetry / Freedom Poem
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for slaves to the master plan of bourgeois stars I stick my pen into the ink sky she says "shake the cosmos, baby, and let the constellations fall where they may" for preacher's sons born under the sign of Purple Rain and Reagan-omics All P.K.s go to Heaven, they say but first theirs the fall for Bad Black Girls wearing their brown skin like Olivia Newton John wore black leather for a midsummer night's dream standing in front of my bay window with an Uzi and a necessary means a prayer for tar...
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Poetry / Faded Dress
I'm asuming "Faded Dress" is referring to the female protagonist of this poem...since there seems to be no other reference to a faded dress in the poem...which is cool. I enjoyed how you captured the scene and the somber mood of the character. however i found it a bit odd that you would change the "voice" of the poem from "omniscient narrative" to "third person narrative" You start off very removed and objective to someone very subjective and far too "human"... lines like, "I guess its too la...
thank you for introducing this great poetic form. of course, i went straight to wikipedia to look up "senyru". not only did i discover a new form but i realized that even the most popular haikus aren't haikus by "definition". as for your piece. you had me for two lines. and lost me with last one...the first two lines do a great job of setting the stage for a very spectacular momment, however the third line just fails to deliver. thanks for the piece.
As a big Twilight Zone fan i really enjoyed the reality bending theme of this piece. However, as a Twilight Zone fan, i found myself looking for more exciting stretches of the imagination. Some of the scenes you describe in your alternate universe are presented clearly... "There are black politicians in Armani suits / With whiteys who shine their shoes There are black guys who aren’t athletic / And whiteys that sing the blues" However, these scenes seem painfully obvious and predictable. Othe...
Haiku/Senryu / Bats
You know poets like you are why Urbis created the whole "goal" segment of this community...you should have submited this piece with the expressed goal of becoming published...this poem is concise, beautifully illustrated, and vivid. thank you.
Poetry / The Wall
I'm not big on poems that have stanzas with all the same letters or words and such. But i have to admit this poem does work...to a degree. You may find fans here who love it. All in all I don't think it harms or helps the poem. Secondly, I hate it when critics bash my poems when I ignore certain rules of grammar. A bit of slang here, an urban colloquialism there never hurt. Especially if it adds to the character of the poem. However, even I looked at lines (5) and (6) a bit side ways. "Leaves...
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