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AGE: 18
LOC: Finland
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 26

After a year-long writing strike, I’m back in the business. Please be honest and mind the grammar, I’m not a native =)

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Bobby G. thought the bowl he was wearing on his shoulders felt uncomfortable, but he had gotten used to it. The bowl was not heavy built but it had been installed somehow wrong. If he could see the bowl from the outside, I am sure he would be surprised. The outside cortex didn’t create images of the world, it was quite plain. It looked like a metal bowl used in cream whipping or in a very modern fruit setting. Well, it was more of a grey, non-transparent fishbowl than a kitchen supply. ...
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Screenplay / Kilimanjaro 4-5
Version 2
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Chris and Robert are sitting in the waiting lounge, watching others board the plane. Robert is drinking coffee from a cardboard cup with a plastic lid. Robert seems to be in his own world, gazing out of the huge windows. Chris tries to enjoy they’re last moments before going back home. CHRIS: How long is the flight gonna take? ROBERT: About 10 and a half hours, with the connection flight. We're flying trough London. CHRIS: (suggesting tone) Ten hours, huh? I think we can come up with 'somethi...
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Screenplay / Kilimanjaro, scene 3
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Scene 3. Toby’s Hotel room A room similar to the one in the beginning, a queen-size bed and a night stand next to it. A poster of an old fashioned map is hanging on the wall over the bed. Clothes on the floor and on a chair and two people lying in bed, with the sheets all twisted around them. Toby MacCallaghan, 18 and a nameless local girl, 18 are lying naked under the sheets. The sun is illuminating the room brightly through the transparent curtains. Toby wakes up, and like Chris and Dorian ...
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Screenplay / Kilimanjaro 3
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Chris and Robert are sitting in the waiting lounge, watching others board the plane. Robert is drinking coffee from a cardboard cup with a plastic lid. Robert seems to be in his own world, gazing out of the huge windows. Chris tries to enjoy they’re last moments before going back home. CHRIS: How long is the flight gonna take? ROBERT: About 10 and a half hours, with the connection flight. We're flying trough London. CHRIS: (suggesting tone) Ten hours, huh? I think we can come up with 'somethi...
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Screenplay / Kilimanjaro
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Kilimanjaro – I’d give everything to get my life back Scene 1. The hotel room The scene takes place in Cape Town, South Africa. It is February and it is end of Spring brake. American students visiting the country are about to return home this day. The first ones the audience are introduced to are a gay couple Christopher Jayden Bicket, 17 and Robert Lawson, 19. It is morning, approaching noon on the day of departure. Robert is standing by an open French window, watching the beautiful scenery ...
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Poetry / Paying the debt.
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Poetry / Candyland
To start off: I liked it a lot. It has a doctor Seuss feeling to it, though it kinda fades away "with deformed smiles" which as a line sounds nice, but doesnt seem to fit. The ending is brilliant, really the price really brings it from absurdity to the nearest walmart, makes it real somehow. If it hadnt been inclined before hand that it is about life, i think i wouldve missed the point, but enojyed the word play and the images. The poem is structered visually, both with the layout as the line...
Screenplay / Minnie's son in law
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Screenplay / Elements
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Screenplay / Left this space
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