Urubuquaqua's profile
AGE:
49
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 05
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 05
Please, don’t review my face. I was thirtheen years old in this picture, it was 1973 and I was already writing by that time, only in another language.
Yes, English is not my first language. Surprise, I have an honours B.A. in English and half an M.A. done in Comparative Literature at the University of Toronto, plus some extra university stuff I don’t know where to classify.
Sure I want constructive criticism. No I don’t need any smart ass kid telling me to use the MS Word spellchecker. I review my stuff many times before I post it. However, there are mistakes that won’t be caught by a spellchecker. Some other times what people may qualify as “mistakes” (depending on their experience and amount of reading, of course) I call “style.”
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I read and re-read your poem. The only mistake I could find is possibly a typo (anapohoric - anaphoric?). Now, what I have to say about your poem: I think you are really, truly talented! This poem has a nice sleepy rhythm (combining with its words), your choice of words is appropriate and your words are beautiful. I like the flow and I like how you develop the poem, coming from a state of semi-sleepiness to the realization of the external world… "The spider’s web gleams with dew Its host spun...
That's an interesting way of using the word "clutter” that I otherwise couldn't image in a poem. The repetition is good. What does it mean "As I worry about you daily I can’t go insane?" - Even if you worry about her you can just worry so much? I don't understand this verse. "Causing an already bad situation to spin more out of control" - this is so un-poetic! Even if you are going to say that, would you consider cutting it a bit, to make it more readable? Maybe like this: "Causing a bad situ...
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Interesting draft, I enjoyed reading it but felt that something is missing. Is this an Irish ghost story or a cautioning tale for kids about the dangers of doing things without thinking? I think you write well and I like your poems too. I even put you on my favourites, so I can read your stuff calmly and write nice, helpful reviews about it. I'll give you a full review next time, when you fully review my work.
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Hello, I gave you a 7, and this is for your writing. You have strength, determination and a good combination of structure and flow; these are fundamental characteristics for a writer. That said, I think you need to review and re-organize your ideas. I'll try and give you some examples below, as I discuss your article. First of all, why is it in the "quotes" category? It's extremely long to be a quote, and it tries to discuss a variety of ideas. In structure, it appears to tend to the essay fo...
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