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AGE: 16
LOC: Lakewood, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 21

I am 16 and I am graduating high school this year. I have recently become interested in poetry and found that I have a little talent for writing it as well. I’m hoping this experience will allow me to write better and make my poems easy to read and follow.

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Haiku/Senryu / Where?
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7 Reviews   0 Comments
They say God helps all. Where was he when she went limp? Helping someone else?
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Poetry / Angel
Version 1
2 Reviews   1 Comment
As I look up at the sky, My heart sinks; I start to cry. Here I'll go when I die. Could I really say goodbye?   Now it's time for me to go. I say "yes;" My heart screams "NO!" I've got to leave friend and foe. Now it's time, yes, I know.   I spread my wings and take to flight. No matter what it's always light; Whether I fly by day or night. This is all so wrong; It feels so right.   I fly high; I fly free. I'm exactly where I want to be. I'm right her...
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Poetry / No More Light
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2 Reviews   2 Comments
Nowhere to hide, You know you can't run. Nothing you can do, Because nothing can be done.   In the middle of the night, You lie in youre bed. You don't feel alive, You know you're not dead.   Darkness comes.   Whining, Screeching, It's coming, It's reaching.   Waiting, Calling, For you to start falling.   Darkness comes.   You don't want to slip, You put up a fight. You're struggle is useless, There is no more light.    
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Poetry / Is It Fair?
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2 Reviews   1 Comment
A broken, little body lays face-up on the floor. He doesn't move, He doesn't breathe.                               His little heart beats no more.   A batter, young woman glares at the mirror. A bloody lip, A black eye.                     &n...
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Young Adult / Journey To Ssekimpi
I like this story; its originality. I do, however, agree with everyone on the grammar and need of a proofreader. It's sketchy and hard to follow at times. I think if you can find a way to re-write the "harder to read" spots and make them clear to the reader, you have a very good story going here.
Haiku/Senryu / It's not the artist
Very true. "Art is in the eye of the beholder." I'd say "Well written," but there's really only one way to write a Haiku. :)
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I really like this. The second verse kind of caught me a little. I think just because the rhyme scheme was a sketchy there. I do like the lyrics and the story they tell though. I would love to hear it put to music.
Non-fiction / Crash
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