Overall, I like it. Nice little shock at the end. Plus, I think it's a sign of good flash when the title, even at a single word, adds something to the story not present in the story itself. So nice work there. you're a bit over the 100-word mark, but I would consider trimming some of the dialogue and adding a few more beats. There's a line or two that could save you a few words and perhaps even add to the drama. For example: “I overheard you on your cell. Talking to your friend.” might work a...

Summary: I like this piece, but the ending fell flat for me. Your language is very good, and I think you do a great job conveying both the insecurity that the woman feels and the pain that the man feels at what the woman does not see. That said, I think you could really knock this one out in the "warm a few hearts" category if you added some kind of resolution at the end. Perhaps some authoritative action from the man where he grabs the woman, tells her how beautiful she is and kisses her. Or...

I love this piece. I noticed your note above after reading the piece and I don't think you need it, unless you're including the questions just because. But I think the piece asks (or answers?) the question quite well. The first and second lines almost play musically together with "like life" and "over light," and I love the second line, even all by itself. This is an excellent piece. Nice work.

I like this piece, and while I think it could use some work, you have a great foundation to start with. The imagery is nice and I think you have a good theme, but the piece is missing a musical quality that the words themselves and images you present need to convey. The cause? I think the timbre and pacing of the piece slowed me down as a reader. Some lines were too long and some were too dense. See the first stanza, for example. The first two lines had a rhythm to them. But the third ("The a...

I really like this poem, and I think there is truth weaved well into each line. Most of the imagery is evocative and powerful. "often rejected to avoid chaos" - love it. A very keen observation. "overcomes the serpents that glare upon the innocent" - I like the imagery here. "Truth requiring a last name..." - Enjoyed this line as well, a strong statement. You really say a lot in this poem as I read it. Kudos for that. I do have one suggestion for improvement. I would try to break up and pace ...

This is a good first draft to an interesting and quirky love story, I think. But it needs work. As it stands right now, it fell flat for me. For one thing, it didn't feel like whole story. More like an introduction to a longer story. There's no conflict or resolution, really. I'd encourage you to lengthen this. Also, I found myself not really identifying with or liking the narrator much. Phrases like "do you imagine someone ugly?" and "even the geeks with no chance at all with him," kind of p...

One of the things that I think marks a good novel is when the writer turns us on our heads by having his protagonist do things that "seem" out of character, but which actually come to define that character. When Bram kisses Brad (names might be too similar, btw. Might consider changing Brad's), you do something unexpected and I think it really works. Great work there. "forcing down bowls of cereal even though it hurt to swallow." - I love this. Lines like this give your character a real and u...

Great piece. I love the phrase "happy potted plant." That seems to really "fit" with the form, for me at least. Only suggestion I would make would be to find a two syllable word or phrase to take the place of extend. Something that evokes excitement or joy on the part of the plant. Perhaps "stretch on" or something similar. Your choice, of course. It's a good piece as is.

Love the reviewer note. :) Very good poem. The imagery did a very nice job of making me feel as though I was experiencing the nightmare as well. A few notes: First stanza: I loved the last line, very creepy. The first two fell flat for me. I'm not sure I "got" the simile between silence and the lamp. You appear like you're trying to explain that comparison in the second line, but I didn't grasp it. Perhaps I'm dense... Second stanza: love it. The comparison of fragmented ideas to an empty bul...