LOL! I remember the old Goofus and Gallant stuff! I really enjoyed this, it made me laugh. A nice morality tale... :) One thing I would suggest is changing the name of Steve to something that rhymes with Daryl and Cheryl (like Merrill). Might add to the sing-songy nature of this piece. Nice work!

I like this piece. It's very original in structure and manages to pack a lot of information about the character and his story into few words. The starting periods don't really work for me, but I don't think they detract from the work at all, so you can take that as a nit-pick and ignore it if you like. Nice work.

I like what you are trying to do here, but it is very rough and needs some work. I like the observations you make and the character you've created, but this seems more like a journal entry or a blog post than flash fiction. I think that if you were to flesh out this character and pepper her observations with actions and interactions, this could be a good story. I hope that helps. Good start!

I like the fact that I was caught by surprise in the second paragraph when I realized that this was a retelling of Goldilocks and the three bears. Very clever! The story was amusing and I enjoyed reading it. However, other than the setting and the protagonist, there's not enough original about this story to really make it more than a straight retelling. I think that you have a good start, but could do a lot more to really raise the irony and tounge-in-cheek nature of the story. You could keep...

This is great! Very nice piece of Nanofiction and very well done! Keep up the good work!

Not bad. I didn't find myself surprised or shocked at all by the last line, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. However, I think with a little work the last sentence could be more of a twist.

I think that this is a nice idea, but it's not very original. That's not a bad thing, but I think you could take this and put your own original stamp on it. It also doesn't feel very lyrical to me. Rather, it reads like a series of short statements that don't really flow from one to the next. Try rewording these and adding your personality and I think you'll have something really good.

I am not sure exactly how Urbis has partnered with Google, so I can't speak directly to that portion of your criticism. That being said, I do not agree with your assertion that using Google is like saying your are ignorant. Rather, I think it would be ignorant for me to say that I don't need Google. You seem to be making the argument that a writer who doesn't always know the right word or words isn't worth his or her salt, and I disagree. For thousands of years, writers and poets alike have w...

This is a nice sentiment. The lyrics are good in spots and just okay in others, but I like the story behind the story. My only recommendation would be to address some of the rhyming words that struck me as a bit hokey "holy cow" and "bow wow" unless they fit the idea you were driving at, of course.

Nice poem. I had to read it through twice to catch that the "you" was not one of the women mentioned in the second stanza, but that may have been my miss. Once I did catch that, I saw the thread of regret and felt it come through in the last stanzas. nice work!