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HAPPY NEW YEAR He took a bottle of whiskey to the neighbours’ party. I've never seen him like this. The operation was postponed before Xmas. Till next year. MEDICAL SCIENCE Bladder cut out, a tube from his stomach to a bag. But 2 late. Did he have strength left to make love? A T shirt on so my mum didnt have to see. IRONY A new drama about a district nurse. Her first patient wracked with cancer. Holds my mum's hand, breaths deepening, till the 2nd adverts. Leaves us to it. GREAT LITERATURE I ...
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SPARROW Dead on the path, neatly folded, not mauled, no branches above to fall from, as though the cold had reached its pea-sized heart between wing beats.
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PRAGUE 1993 A window display of soap powder but it's already the West. We tell people where we're going: they laugh, translate for their friends, wish us luck. HISTORY Battle green carriages stretch out of the station, each stencilled with a star. Compartments off an aisle, bunks, for the two days back to Moscow. RABBIT We share our compartment with a businessman – he doesn't add more; gives us chicken-sized haunches, slices cured fat with my Swiss army knife, toasts us. BORDER The rails on t...
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KANSAS Walking home I start humming a tune, then notice why: the town hall bells are marking 9.30 on a Thursday evening by playing Somewhere Over the Rainbow.
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AMATEUR Kneeling in an office blouse. A dog barks & a budgie chirrups. A fist yanks a cock till it comes across her face. She opens her eyes, looks up & laughs.
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not great I'm afraid, but since you are only 17, that's fine, and no measure of talent just take this line as an example, which is the best line: trodden on by child-like infants dreaming of dragons how can an infant not be child like? By definition. If you'd said "an infant like an old man" that might be interesting, depending on the context. You need to learn to describe first. Try early Ted Hughes, and study carefully how he describes what he's looking at. If you're serious about wanting t...
great. I just wondered about whether you needed to introduce the frogs so early. Maybe not have them till the big one drops out of the wall, then keep the "only saw it once again" paragraph and end on the mother. start and end with the mother, her teeth almost surreal enough, but the prosaicness of that keeps the whole thing grounded, too many frogs detract from that a bit and mean it's just a flight of invention very good though
I wondered what the reason for the quite mannered, archaic literary language was. I thought this might have been a conscious pastiche, but then "event horizon" is such a contemporary phrase, in a totally different register to the C19th tone of the rest of the language. At one point it reminded me of gerard manley hopkins for some reason. If the language isn't intended as a pastiche, why have you chosen to write in a way that's so far from normal contemporary speach? That's not a criticism, bu...
the only thing I didn't like about this was wether it rang true as a police proceedural. Given someone who by the end, though I enjoyed the end a lot, was so clearly deranged - at least from the point of view of the law - would the interview be conducted quite like this? They might just take a statement in silence from someone they considered insane. It's an open and shut case for them. I did though enjoy the way the story shifted my expectations. First I thought she'd be killed, but I really...
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