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LAST LOGIN: November 24
LAST LOGIN: November 24
Hey folks, this is the first time I’ve ever joined one of these sites. I’ve been writing off and on in my spare time and having a total blast with it. Now, I’m getting the itch to have people actually read what I write! Whodathunk, eh? I’ll do my best to give as much as you do
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Dear Peaches, I don’t know why I’m writing this, it was my shrink’s idea. He thinks this will help me. Give me closure or some such shit. But you’re dead. Can’t get much more closed than that. Whatever. At this point I’ll try anything. Okay, where do I begin? Hello, I guess would be a good start. Normally I’d ask how you are doing but I already know the answer to that one. Me? I don’t really sleep anymore, I don’t think I’ve had a good night sleep since we buried you. The hours seem to blend,...
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A True Tale of a Complete and Total Idiot Yes, it is true. I am an idiot. I would love to deny it, but I simply can’t. Much to my embarrassment, this tale will illustrate just how stupid I can be. I wish I could say that I was tricked, or duped, or even drunk at the time, but alas, the impressive display of foolishness you are about to read is all me. Let me begin by introducing myself. My name is Gunther Kilby and I’m a writer. Perhaps you’ve heard of me? I used to be famous. I’ve written tw...
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A very interesting story and a very interesting way of telling. Very distant, very clinical. I felt like this was a segment on 20/20, we just watched this girl have a wasted life and we didn't do anything about it. Which was the goal, I gather. I would have liked a bit more, same style of writing, just a few more snapshots to get us to really understand where she's going. I didn't feel she was quite at the suicidal level yet - perhaps that was a result of the distance of story, I don't know. ...
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Heheh, this was a great little story. I have studied both painting and writing and I thought you did a good job envisioning the world of a painter with foreign eyes. I will say here, though, that being able to see with an artist's eye has helped me when I'm trying to describe things in my writer's voice. I don't believe they are mutually exclusive. Um...sorry about that, I should keep this about your story. There really isn't much wrong with this, so I find it difficult to critique. I would h...
Wow. What a delicate and precise piece! Excellent use of language and I liked the tone. You had me guessing there for a while as to what your point was but you wrapped up very nicely by the end and even managed to put on the pretty red ribbon. And such a poignant moment: "i love you forty dollars." That is something my little niece would say to me. Great job. Wish i could give you something more concrete but this was just really well done!
Hey, this was a good story, but i feel that it is entirely unfinished! I'm hoping there is more because there is too much unresolved stuff here! Well, let me get to some specifics then. First, I like your tone. It feels like a therapist. Observational yet oddly detached, like things are happenng to your character that she's experiencing yet not quite living. The pace you set is good, I'm never lost about what is going on. And I think those inserted "psyche-test" questions are just brilliant! ...
Good piece. I didn't quite get the ending, though, it felt like there was something else to be said. Something a little more profound. You gave some really great imagery at times and I think you really nailed the voice of a young - not really sure how young, though - woman growing up in a house full of disgruntled men not happy with their lives. The dream sequence was okay but it kind of disrutped things...you know, I was just getting into the flow when BOOM!, I'm not where I was and Tommy is...
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