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AGE: 38
LOC: Menomonie, WI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 07

“Plot is no more than footprints left in the snow after your characters have run by on their way to incredible destinations. Plot is observed after the fact rather than before. It cannot precede action. That is all plot should ever be. It is human desire let run, running and reaching a goal. It cannot be mechanical. It can only be dynamic.”

Ray Bradbury, Zen in the Art of Writing.

        I took a long round-about way to get here, but I finally feel like I am doing what I was meant to do. I wrote stories on and off through my life. But at some point in my teen years I decided that writing was too hard of a field to break into so naturally, I choose a much easier field to break into. I went to college and earned a B.A. degree…

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Laurie A Will E4191 County Road P Menomonie, WI 54751 715-235-4092 laurieawill@witty.com September 24, 2008 Mr. Laurence J. Kirshbaum LJK Literary Management, LLC 708 3rd Avenue, 16th Floor New York, NY 10017 Dear Mr. Kirshbaum, I am seeking representation for my novel Into The Master’s Lair. This 135,000 word fantasy with a romantic twist falls somewhere between Margaret Weis and Tracy Hickman’s Dragons of Autumn Twilight series and Terry Goodkind’s Sword of Truth series. ...
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Laurie A Will E4191 County Road P Menomonie, WI 54751 715-235-4092 laurieawill@witty.com September 24, 2008 Mr. Laurence J. Kirshbaum LJK Literary Management, LLC 708 3rd Floor New York, NY 10017 Dear Mr. Kirshbaum, I am seeking representation for my novel Into The Master’s Lair. This 135,000 word fantasy with a romantic twist falls somewhere between Margaret Weis and Tracy Hickman’s Dragons of Autumn Twilight series and Terry Goodkind’s Sword of Truth series. Into The Mast...
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Chapter One – The villain and protagonist are introduced. The villain is mysterious wizard bent on revenge. Twenty five year old Lauriana and her two brothers and two cousins find a secret room. Smoke fills the room and they lose consciousness. Chapter Two – The five wake up in a parallel world where they find themselves physically altered. Lauriana is taller and stronger, her brothers a dwarf and combatant, her cousins an elf and magic tyro. A wizard (Zeke) offers to help them fi...
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                                                      Chapter One                                               &nbs...
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Chapter One – The villain and protagonist are introduced. The villain is mysterious wizard bent on revenge. Twenty five year old Lauriana and her two brothers and two cousins find a secret room. Smoke fills the room and they lose consciousness. Chapter Two – The five wake up in a parallel world where they find themselves physically altered. Lauriana is taller and stronger, her brothers a dwarf and combatant, her cousins an elf and magic tyro. A wizard (Zeke) offers to help them fi...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter Four: A Wish to Die
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Another good chapter. The plot builds always providing more twists and turns. The characters grow and adapt to their surroundings as believable characters should. I look forward to the next chapter. The amber eyes Her amber “around her in” on? “unstable ground.” Not sure exactly what you mean here. “student said sympathetically.” You don’t need ‘sympathetically.’ The dialogue coupled with the fact that Amberley is excited about the subject shows the sympathy. “replied Amberley knowingly.” You...
Novel Treatments / A Second Chance
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The query promises and exciting novel and the first chapter lives up to the promise. The characters come to life and the landscape is so vividly described the reader feels like their right there. I’d definitely buy this book. “of the series,” This is probably just being nit-picky, but ‘of a series’ sounds a little better. “ruled by the tyrannical Watchman of Araidia.” You may want to ask people about this sentence. I am wondering if it could be interpreted as the Watchman ruling Earth and Sha...