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AGE: 27
LOC: Freeville, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 22

I write and read obsessively. I rarely sleep and Im constantly overwhelmed with ideas. Im attempting to focus more on my writings and joining Urbis is my first step towards attempting to gain more feedback and become a better craftsman of the art.

I am not a writer…i merely am forced to record my thoughts on many occasions.

i am not a painter…but my soul sees in colors.

Many writings and artwork available for your viewing at http://www.myspace.com/sunforged
http://www.sunforged.com

‘The only truly endearing feature in another is the ability to confirm anothers illusions and farces, to boost the ego and act supportingly in everyones personal episodes, eschewing ones own filters, for the shared and common filter, creati…

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Le Fin de Monde Josh Gallagher I come into consciousness inside of her, awake, alert and excited we did our morning stretches. Like puzzle pieces our parts do fit, her small soft body easily encompassed by my lithe flexible grip. Her soft moans well returning my ever increasing efforts. Oh to be her, awakened through bodily pleasure, penetrated, petted and pleasured. Like puzzle pieces we do fit. Light chatter, gentle strokes, searching grips the soft morning comfort escalating lustfully towa...

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The only truly endearing feature in another is the ability to confirm anothers illusions and farces, to boost the ego and act supportingly in everyones personal episodes, eschewing ones own filters, for the shared and common filter, creating a harmony and hopefully an uplifting shared experience. Such a subtle thing, destroyed if recognized wholly, is only captured best by the truly receptive through the slighest of visual, aural, oral and body cues. Together as actors in this place we all ca...

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Pannish Veil Spring Air, making damp, warm groomed underbrush Silk Forests, teeming with Hickory Wood Two bunnies romp Scents that excite, nostrils flare When the hares run bare Feverishly palming on downy delights Doeful eyes, glazed gaze Brown nether delta, explored In and Out Roman warrior,.clad Battling life, plastically Thousands die in reservoir land Crevice jelly, tastes explored Hip hug, pungent air Reaching deeply, Tut's lair Pricked softly, edge pulling hair Openly spreading our sha...

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by oknapp

Some minor typos in the first paragraph: After the she how mama taked about dog days Once I saw how long this work was I stopped collecting them, you do need to capitalize "Mama" throughout the piece. It was a bit difficult to get through, between the odd formatting (probably a Urbis upload issue) and the Kentucky dialect (I didnt enjoy reading Huck Finn either!) for me. When I did reach the conclusion, I was impressed, your pacing throughout is well done, your characters are well developed a...

by napalmwriter

Very entertaining! I shudder as I notice my own traits in your dossier of Urbisites. Generally, I review like a Copy Editor (because I was once) and feel like a Laureate (though I dont deserve to) I think I can shed some light on the "mystery buddy," I am guilty of just that, I befriend people as a technique of bookmarking for future reading, although I think this in some way affects my ability to receive/give reviews? Ive learned to steer clear of, "the gentle soul" and "the angry teenage gi...

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by oknapp

I really like the concept of the story, the haunting portrait, interpreted differently be each guilty viewer. Really great. 27 pages on a computer screen yet I had no issues with continuing on, you actually had me interested and curious. A good example of old fashioned story telling. Realizing its a rough draft, I will keep the nitpicking to a minimum, hopefully all helpful notes. "My henchman"- first paragraph, In a conversation between two elderly upper class british/europeans your charact...

by terry_snipes

Pretty much a disjointed rant, im not spell bound by the language nor is my mind awakened to new viewpoints. Thats the extent of my literary review. BUT, a wonderful attempt, you must continue to spread this type of truth, I only criticize because in order to be heard you must be able to draw in your readers and/or listeners. I would like you to be heard. Preach, use anecdotes, appeal to emotion, get your message across. This is dry toast, feed the people cheesecake.

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