I liked it because it gave a nice realistic view of what ppl acutally do on these IMs. I liked it but at times I had to double check. I wish we had more back ground info on them. Maybe if you include the texting and what is happening around them also. Jumpfrom the etxting to regular first person or thrid person or rotaing third perosn. I think it will make the story even more great. Just a bit more content. If you want a better idea of what I'm talking about you can mail me. NIce job.

omg this was really really good, i wish i knew who actually wrote it, this is excellent piecec of work, i know u knwo that because you knwo great work, thank you for sharing *smiles*

I would like to say that I enjoyed this piece. It flowed very well for me. It reminded me of a friendship I have. My favorite lines were: "Call me at night when the moon is bright And the lights are dark all around you" I enjoyed the imagery you portrayed. Continue to write, i see you becoming even greater. Sammi :)

I enjoyed the twist to the story. It was done a very light manner. You would think he would be angry but he just had to laugh at himself. I wish it could have been a little more descriptive and flowed a bit better. It felt choppy in some places. I enjoyed the imagery. My favorite lines were: "She put her fingers on my lips and feeling wings growing on my back, I drove off with the goddess." I suggest a bit more flow and just more description. Like what happened to the client he was suppose to...

I must say I definitely enjoyed your poem I can see two people eyeing each other but no one has made the move yet. I almost felt i could taste the coffee and see what the atmosphere might be like. I truly have no complaints on this. My favorite lines were: "can i taste your coffee straight from you lips we can talk about showers honest hips and cruise ships ill tell you about my impossible fantasies and how hard i fought to find the man in me i listen as your words bring to mind a lifetime of...

I must say I have read your poem 4 times over and trying to analyze and break it down. I must say I enjoy it and it makes me think. I love the imagery and the word choice. But could you reveal to me exactly what you meant by the poem. my fav line was every line but if i have to choose it would be line 5 through 8. lovely poem tho..truly... sammi :)

This is a flash fiction that can totally be transformed into a full length story. I was kind of sad that it ended because I wanted to continue and know the young man and his life a bit more. I wanted to understand him cause he felt quite real. I truly have no complaints but i wish it was longer. :) You are good writer from just this small piece of work. Lovely piece of work. Sammi

From coming straight from the head that's lovely. I find most lovely poem come straight from the heart and mind right on the spot. I enjoyed this simple piece because it says a lot with out being too wordy. My fave line was: "You've been a foe: freezing up and changing me to winter; internal Medusa, you have turned me to stone." Great imagery with those lines. Sammi

And so are many others. But the few words hold heavy meaning. Sammi

All I can say is i truly enjoyed your work here. The story telling was lovely. Your use of descriptive imagery was wonderful. I could see this beautiful girl amongst a sea of snobby people who area dime a dozen. You area great story teller. The ending was quite shocking but i wasn't surprised in a way. I didn't feel sorry for her, although i feel guilty that I should be. Sammi PS def a fav on my list