SteveP's profile

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AGE: 28
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 10

I am from bristol – uk, havealot of big and bright ideas.

Sometimes i even follow the ideas through.

18 months – 2 years ago I started to take poetry seriously.

I genuinely write for my amusement, self therapy or as I discovered recentley as I enjoy telling stories and enjoy reactions of people.

Started to perform open mics and applying for grants for Royal Arts Council and magazines

One day I want a book to be published, I have a very vivid idea for a collection.

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It started by naming the neighbours cat nothing strange about that at first glance Dive deeper you will find that he didn't know anything about the owners other then they lived at no53 and he at 51   Dive deeper, deeper still you could see the concern etched in-between the middle-aged wrinkles always managed to avoid eye contact if you past him by on the street noticed that he had very warn down finger nails, very keen gardner after his wife died   Tabitha, that is what he called he...
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Poetry / The Pedestrian
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The Pedestrian Weary lost in the hub of the departure lounge espresso roast decaf dregs, swirling in hand business men and woman holidaymakers and weekend breakers come to and through their excitement a murmur as memories of Alfresco café’s come to pass Raise a smile fingers begin to walk across the metallic table toes felt the sprinkling sands at Whitsundays adding to the sparkle of the ebb and flow whilst lovers talk the sun captures night Curled duckling feathers casting shadows over the d...
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The Civil War of Aris Last seen amongst the trash slumped between the alleyways of the theatre and the pokey public house… Sandals slipped off A burden in the puddles. Crumpled newspaper clenched in between the toes yesterday stories of ill will and City back to winning ways Eyes clenched hiding his green pools sodden hair, curling at the brow cradling his chest to ease the suffering within forgetting shirt sleeves are drenched …arguing moved to push and shove barking with vile charging and r...
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How Morning Broke © s payne 2005 Attack – Machete Blood dripping as confetti This is how morning was broke Dawn of screams No bird song Sunrise bleeding out Innocence forgotten Frightened of this day The longing inevitability Slaughtering frenzy Tears of victims Sobs from a witness Mixing with beads of sweat Of militia, young men Sworn to fight Taught to hate (another kind) Buried – orphaned Some father’s son This is how evening fell Moon cut in two Starlight blinking out Pray mistaken as Ple...
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Poetry / Love Never Known
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Love Never Known © s payne 2006 Amongst the rowdiness Laughter and chatter Mood of change She’s taken to him Moth to the flame Amongst the backdrop Fructis styled hair Pitcher for seven He tries not to stare Picture for an empty frame Hands rooted in pockets Of green tweed Gentle sway of hips As thoughts dismiss Her lips on his Clasping an overpriced glass Thinking quickly To keep the emeralds interest While heart is ripping chest Blocking the crowd less and less Night turned to new day Not w...
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This is a great poem. Its more than that its a great story told with excellant pace. Starting off you feel the mythology. I can't mark this a ten but its nearly there. For me, the start of the oem with the "Come live with me in Faerie Land, come grant your hand to me, come dab your eyes with sleeping sand" The style of the stanza could maybe be repeated, in terms of 3 lines somewhere being repeated. It just helps remind the reader what has gone on in prior pages and can be effective when swit...
clever, tkaes a few reads to understand before reading your intro. would fit nicely in to a haiku.
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Poetry / soft and bright
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Poetry / The Flesh
thin kthis peice works well as a short story, may well be the lay out that gave me problems as not true to form or stanza that are traditionally, this reflects my scoring. However is a fast paced piece of writing that has few errors or faults.
a love lorn poem, crafted well by the pace within the stanzas Would offer this as an option, and something that may help to the flow. Capitals at the start of each line? is it necessary, it may well be intentional that you are encourage the reader to take a breathe at the end of each line, have a look how ir reads without the capitals, specially the last verse. 4 stanza makes me wonder who the love is for, and suttle changes that are weaved in and out makes for a interesting read
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