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AGE:
44
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 12
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 12
I live on 2 acres on a Florida Atlantic beach. In photo below I was sailing in the Greek Islands after biking in France.
Ph.D. in philosophy. Fluent in French,have studied years of classical Latin and Greek.
I love to paint & play the piano (mostly Chopin, Mozart and Bach), I love Italian Bel Canto opera, love language and languages; traveled through China, Malaysia, K.L., Thailand, India, Africa, Egypt, Turkey, Germany, all the Scandinavian countries, had a business in Russia for 7 years, and have spent a great deal of time in France. Hot-air ballooning in France and Africa.
I write free-verse only occasionally, but would like to resume. Tried my hand the other day in Beach Walk that I will post.
My “Life philosophy” is …
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A subtle shift in shadows fills my room. Strains of Bach that helped me slip to sleep last night while Sandman kissed with luscious lips my leaden lids still fills my space to signal yet another day. A shimmering sea stretches to vision’s end, Apollo on golden orb already rising to notch another nick in endless time. Is there a point to struggle forth? Two cats appear like stealth shadows to prone their place upon my torso, still slumbering, nude nudges make their presence felt. Sensuous stro...
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I walk the beach in nearly naked solitude. Skin, sun-sponged with warming, gentle strokes of eons past and daubed with life's elixir of some long-lost secret scent. Nostrils tortured to retrieve my first encounter. At waters' edge, time-traveled feet swash through shifting sands anointed by frothy fingers of milk from millennia past, Deftly tying tentacles to some Long-forgotten time machine. My inner eye becomes bewitched with sights not known to man. Mesmerizing, mysterious music fills endl...
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Your style is very direct and straightforward. Since "style is the man" it is very difficult to be objective without being judgmental. I like your directness, but I would have liked to read some imagery that would have painted a few word vignettes to express the depth of your feelings. I was a bit puzzled by the construction of "I don’t know what it is Blue,". Did you mean that your feel blue, depressed but can't explain it? Nicely done. I will look for more. Stargate
The writing is generally clear and suited to a Press Release. I might suggest a few editorial changes for clarity and to tighten sentence structure: Publisher iUniverse, Inc., the leading provider of publishing technology solutions for authors, lauds with its prestigious Publisher’s Choice Award, the release of Little Woods by Steve Campbell. Little Woods is an action novel set in the Chicago area in 1833. The story follows Native Americans in the aftermath of the Black Hawk War whence ensued...
A very good read. You use words imaginatively and create some very nice images. I particularly like the stanza beginning with . . . Spain land of my youth . . . and ending with "fluttering welcoming grasses." I felt this stanza contained some of your best images. I will look for more. Stargate
It is difficult to evaluate your writing with only brief excerpts. Overall, however, I would describe you style as clear and consistent. With a good plot and character development you should be able to construct an engaging work. I would point out only one editorial inconsistency: At the end of Line 1, you insert a comma to separate "literally and figuratively." You follow figuratively, however with a dash. Either two commas or two dashes but not one of each. Good luck. Stargagte
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