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AGE: 38
LOC: Danbury, CT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 10

StarGirl’s first novella, A Single Sparrow, placed quarter-finalist in the New Century Writer 2003 Competition; most recently, her story “Bird Letters” was commended in the Tom Howard/John H. Reid Short Story Competition.

In addition, her story “Wailing Station” (not the version posted below, but one much tighter and well-workshopped) placed second in the Toasted Cheese “Dead of Winter 2006” contest.

Her short fiction has been featured in The Adirondack Review, Afternoon, Barbaric Yawp, Bewildering Stories, Chick Flicks, The Circle, Citizen Culture, I Like Monkeys, New Witch Magazine, Sinfully Twisted, Toasted Cheese, The Taj Mahal Review and a host of others, including the anthologies Chaos Theory, Every Other Tuesday and As Seen…

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Short Story / The Apple Queen
Version 1
2 Reviews   3 Comments
Every year it was Lucy’s duty to wait for the light to change; that shaft of soft, white light through her bedroom window that was just to the left of where the light had been the previous morning. The light of spring; the light that signaled the harsh, skeletal Vermont winter was over, and though there may be one more snow, and piles of it in the woods, the air was soon going to smell like moss and warming earth. On this day she was going into the forest behind her house to the muddy stream ...
Short Story / Camouflage
Version 1
7 Reviews   10 Comments
Now, as Calypso was behind Lot, rooting her brand-new hiking boots into the soil, she admired herself for taking such a risk. He stopped and rested his hand on his eagle-headed walking stick. “I know this seems like a long way to hike, but this place is absolutely going to be worth it.” He mopped the sweat from his brow with his arm. “It’s like I told you, the sheer advancement of the decay—” he made a sweeping motion with his hand, like he had that night in the bar when he’d proposed this wh...
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Short Story / Tooth & Claw
Version 1
9 Reviews   3 Comments
On our island, the crabs grew to the size of coconuts and bore bruises on their bright red backs, and Grandmother, a noisy woman, made one angry. It was the dry season, and all the crabs were hiding in their burrows. A robust female with a claw pegged with teeth sharp as pushpins had made for herself a home in Grandmother’s garden; she had spent hours raking dead leaves through the meticulous rows of orchids to her temporary abode and wadded them up at her burrow’s entrance, packing them tigh...
Reviews
Short Story / I don't belong here
Okay, I'm going to make some comments about your writing, as asked...and I found VERY little...but I would like first to say that I LOVE THIS. Here's some areas where I thought this piece could be improved: First, I'd give some thought to your title: "I don't belong here." Although at the beginning it seems to make sense, I thought the business where you quoted Hunter Thompson was much more powerful: maybe call it, "The Edge"? Your last paragraph didn't seem to wrap back around: it seemed alm...
Short Story / Abused
Hi there! I enjoyed reading this. It was a nice break to have something clear and short! Interesting. I don't have much to comment on with regard to this because in your comments you implied that this was more non-fiction than fiction, so instead I decided I'd point out more some grammar things that could be fixed to make the piece better as a whole. I think your opening lines are solid -- Alice had just come back from St. Paul, Minnesota. She had only been there 3 months and came back home d...
Short Story / Cannot Find Server
This is a cute anecdote that would make a neat submission to a magazine which accepts flash fiction. I like the title and the fact it's a double entendre -- when I first called this up I was sure this was going to be a computer story -- and I like the end's punchline, even though it doesn't seem to have much connection to what happens in the rest of the story. I have a few suggestions for cleaning this up -- most of them are with sentences, and, in addition, I did feel that in some spots, esp...
Short Story / Among the weeds # 2
I really think you've got potential as a writer here -- certainly to get published (and that's all a crap shoot, anyway) and becoming a better writer through good feedback. I LOVE feedback. Feedback is our bread and butter. Anyway, I'm going to point out a few things I liked and then make some comments. Years passed and the son...maple was killed. GREAT. A chilling paragraph, and I think it's the crux of the piece. I also like the idea that perfection is definitely in the eye of the beholder,...
Short Story / Maggy
I definitely think you should invest the time in finishing this -- if you can remember where you were going with it, and if you weren't, start over. I especially liked the opening of this: the whole business about what she sees or doesn't see is very strong, because this is followed immediately thereafter by the paragraph about the importance of her active imagination. This area could use a little cleaning up: where you have "buttered toast" twice. I'd only use the sentence once. In addition,...