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AGE: 52
LOC: Delco, NC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 20

Spriglief is a poet who is following his star to the new horizon.

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A Mogul Debates Her Maid In the court of the Moguls The anvil of world culture Two women fought for tenure The treasure a prince’s heart Future queen of the Indus The veil no shield to either Anakarli a courtesan by trade Servant of a Rajput Queen Whose affection of Salim Heir of Akbar the Great Lavished in palace gardens Mirth a musical timbre Indulgent Jodhbai’s court To give in fancy of beauty Busy bees gathering nectar She lavishly wraps in wealth A romance kept in stealt...
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A Mogul Debates Her Maid In court of the Moguls The anvil of world culture Two women fought for tenure The prize a prince’s heart Future queen of the Indus The veil no protection to either. Anakarli, courtesan by trade, Maid of a Rajput Queen, Whose love of Salim, Heir of Akbar the Great, She lavished on in palace gardens, Laughter a musical instrument. Indulgent of all Theirs to give In love of beauty Queen Jodhabai warped Anarkali In the wealth of an empire Most favored in the Que...
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Poetry / The Fatima Tree
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Oh Fatima, The apple of your father’s eye, Whose cool shade I now bade, Hear my prayer, my supplication. Everyone knows your fruit. Let me be as fruitful, Let me be as loved. My roots need nourishment, My soul is thirsty, Send to me an Ali. Give me your peaceful patience. Give me a woman’s modesty, A mother’s contentment. Bring me into my season. Let my nectar allure the bee, The one you have for me. Then let me bear for him, With strong limbs, Children! Until I am known as ...
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Poetry / The Fatima Tree
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Oh Fatima, The apple of your father’s eye, Whose cool shade I now bade, Hear my prayer, my supplication. Everyone knows your fruit. Let me be as fruitful, Let me be as loved. My roots need nourishment, My soul is thirsty, Send to me an Ali. Give me your peaceful patience. Give me a woman’s modesty, A mother’s contentment. Bring me into my season. Let my nectar allure the bee, The one you have for me. Then let me bear for him, With strong limbs, Children! Until I am know as y...
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The genocidal regard people in terms of abstract categories Rather than a person’s distinct personality These people kill according to categories they assign With a bureaucrats order making zeal As all holocausts are made with efficiencies in mind Because genocide is the dream of a modern power Exercised demographically on its populations It becomes a sacrifice to State modernity As hate is mobilized to its service To form a blood bond with the citizenry If we continue to think in utili...
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Poetry / Spoiled
I don’t think it is too preachy at all and love the way you capitalized “Them,” as the do act like God’s on Olympus. Maybe you should have said something about gated communities. It is a relatively recent phenomenon here, though in the 3rd world they have always been there. Personally, I see them as the van guard of the third world invasion when soon middle class America will have to scrap for a meal. This is preachy, not your write.
I wish they could all be as good as your closing line. It’s funny and ego definitely has something to do with it.
Lyrics / "Fight"
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Line 8, change “legs” to limbs and keep that tree metaphor going. Your readers will understand you mean legs. Line 11, “evil” is a strong word as sex is not evil in and of itself. I would use a word like “mundane” or “stark.” The ending is rather weak. I think you could use the tree metaphor even more, something like, “the sun dawns on the buds of sexual desire,” or some such thing. Love what you did with this poem.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / 6 words to run with
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