Smay's profile
AGE:
21
LOC: Netherlands
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
LOC: Netherlands
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
Hi!
I’m a 21 year old girl from Holland. I study Philosophy, but will transfer to literary studies next year.
Most of my writing goes on at my blog (http://thewritingdeskconundrum.wordpress.com/)
but i’m also writing a book.
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‘Get down!’ Thursday screamed at me. I found myself hiding next to Isabella who soon fainted. The front door had exploded and Thursday and Miss Havisham had pulled out their guns. I stayed away from most of the action while bullets were shot. It turned out to be a group of ProCaths, wanting to kill Heathcliff. There was even more gunfire and shrapnel flew through the room. The cast of Wuthering Heights screamed while the ProCaths told their demands. ‘Polly, stay down.&rsquo...
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While browsing through my collection of books I stumbled upon ‘The picture of Dorian Gray’. It had been my first big story of Oscar Wilde and has been one of my favourite stories ever since. I opened it on a random page and the story came rushing over me. I opened my eyes and found myself in the middle of a library. In front of me was a young man, who I immediately recognized as Dorian Gray. Everything Oscar Wilde had written about him was true. He really was incredibly beautiful...
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Bored with everyday life I turned to books. One book in particular. It was a book that made me feel sad and was crazy, but not in an Alice in Wonderland-crazy kind of way. It was a book written by the Japanese Haruki Murakami. A book that at first seemed to hold two stories, but later you find out it is one story, just in different worlds. It was called Hard-boiled Wonderland and the end of the world. It had been a hard decision, picking between the nameless character in the semi-real world d...
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Still pondering over my conversation with the Offshore Pirate I went back to studying. A test about Locke’s ‘An Essay concerning Human Understanding’ was coming up soon and the reading wasn’t going as fast as it should. To be honest, I didn’t really care about John Locke and his big thoughts on whatever he was writing about. His style of writing had the tendency to make me wonder if there was anything good left in philosophy. He made these long and dreary sentenc...
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While studying I found myself extremely bored. I perused the room for something more interesting than 18th century philosophers and found a 20th century writer. Excited about not having to read tedious words I opened a copy of the collected work of F. Scott Fitzgerald and looked for my favourite story. The Offshore Pirate was about a snobby girl named Ardita wanting to find a man with courage and imagination. She found the Offshore Pirate, also known as Curtis Carlyle, who turns out to be a b...
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I don't want to go into grammar mistakes too much, but sometimes you use some very weird words. 'hat sje had some supporters in there but she also knew that she had detractors.' And as far as I know Major Ryan is enough. You only use the dot if it is an abbreviation. Or she just might be angry over the fact that I'm sleeping with her husband, but then again she doesn't know about that, maybe she does, who knows, who cares!" This seemes a bit weird. All of a sudden she's very excited It would ...
Here's your answer; my Uncle is the owner!. You as the narrator talks to the reader. I think this can work sometimes, but for me this was a case where it didn't. It's too excited to explain something to the reader. ( I suck at math so fuck you if I have it wrong), Here it does work. It adds to the character. My Uncle Adrian always said it was what would bury my own grave one day. -> Bury your own grave? Don't you mean DIG your own grave? self after self -> Did you mean Shelf? some of my...
I think it really creates a sad feeling and you do it very well. But i don't really like the repeating of the title in every part. I think it would work better and have more power if you only use it in the first and last part. I also didn't think this sentence really worked: 'I want you to come back, please -oh please- do'. The -oh please- takes you out of the story. I do really like the sentence 'I miss the playful names you called me'. It makes it easy to relate to the narrator.
You have some weird sentences in your story: - I guess that makes the dream and the reality one in the same doesn’t it. - Through all this, has anyone ever suddenly the dream was over? - well-thought out - the fact that I had even chosen to come to a place like Friendship - I know I had a dumb moment to even have been guilt tripped into this. But these might be a matter of personal taste. I didn't find any other spelling errors. The story does sound kind of young. I was also suprised that the...
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