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AGE: 18
LOC: Glen Carbon, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 19

I am someone who has trouble with reality. It disagrees with me and so I cannot accept it for what it is. So I write through the depths of my despair, of what so few can see. I am who I am, and so I am me.

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Poetry / A City of Light
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42 Reviews   4 Comments
A welcoming, warm breeze Whistles through a broken quiet. A song like a whisper, Spoken in solemn sound; “Fly me to the moon, Let me play among the stars”. A subtle mumble, Under the roar Of people in a hurry. The wind carries Their drunken laughter aloft, A flirtatious babble ensues, Unrequited by tongues of drought. Their faces blurred out, By blinding flashes Of every bright light. All colors cast, In a host Of iridescent depth. Modern-day mountains Breach the sky, Their heads ...
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Poetry / The Saint
Version 1
52 Reviews   2 Comments
As his heart is told And spoken true The sinner's hold Is pushing through But as he lies by truth He spends his youth And lives by lies so true
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Poetry / In Shadow
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51 Reviews   0 Comments
Here in shadows found The secret’s told again Spoken in solemn sound These memories born of sin Here we find infection speaks With lies of hope we make Among the endless smiles we seek The thoughts of hope will break Here we find that love is lost As day by day we fade Alone and hurt our thoughts accosted Side by side with shallow fate Yet, Here in shadows cast We find beauty true Among the broken vast The shadows we hold to
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52 Reviews   1 Comment
Be strong if only for me This pain it can not last If you must, savor a memory This feeling will surely pass I see your soul is burning Your heart tied off in chains Yet still your love is yearning And with it your passion remains I am sorry I am no longer here To stand by you at your side But please for me no longer fear For your aching will surely subside I watch you from the skies And see you curse your love I see your happiness lies And see you abandon the God above I beg of you to mourn ...
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Poetry / Spoken Softly
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53 Reviews   0 Comments
On the floor my heart lies, Bent and broken. Savor every moment of this For now it dies. Buried by her ever sweet smiles That carve into my chest Her mauled form of love so true To scar my memories This euphony that smites me Spoken from her lips And it burns a hole through everyone who feels it I am not holding on until the end Seemingly burning through loneliness I hang on to all that has purpose Despite entropy and pain So sleep under the moon And o'er the rose And think of me nevermore On...
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This was a fantastic poem but there are a few things that may have been done differently. For one, it seems as if you tried too hard to force the ABAB rhyme scheme;it may have been better as a free-verse poem. I enjoyed the use of anaphora with "It is the valley of the shadow of death". I also believe that you may have used some creative imagery but it could have been elaborated more. Other than that I loved it. Good job.
Locked
Very imaginative and descriptive. The factor that stood out to me the most was your use of elaborate imagery. It painted a clear and vivid picture to me the reader. The only real flaw in this piece, and opinionated at that, was your use of dialogue. I found the conversations between two characters to be somewhat lacking of emotion. In order for a character to be dynamic he/she must be emotive in some way. Make it sound like two people would be talking in reality. It throws the reader off when...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Book of the TERRACKEN
Locked
Very well done. For one your dialogue flowed nicely and was not choppy whatsoever. You were able to maintain a steady flow of continuous conversation which can be rather difficult so I applaud you for that. One thing I would consider working on is your use of military dialect. Many casual readers may not understand all aspects of military terms. I am currently a United States Marine so I understand most of the literature yet at times it still becomes overbearing and somewhat demeaning to thos...