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This is a very good story, it had me wondering until the end. The beginning held my attention all the way until the end. I enjoy reading it and I am going to make it one of my favorites. You were very descriptive and you also used the, "Show don't tell" part. I could feel what the woman was going through and how it just ate away at her. Great Job. Keep writing good stories.

I think it needs be more descriptive. Yes, a lot of people know about the falling towers, but it doesn't give the details to the person that don't. It also doesn't say why guys named Muhammad were slammed on police cars. "Then the Pentagon followed by Pennsylvania.", still not enough detail. You have a good story there and I enjoyed reading it, but I feel it has a lot of notes of what happened on that day. Lot of the sentences needs to flow with the rest of the story. It was little hard to fo...

I found your story very creative. It was short on some things though. Some of it could use some extra information for a better understanding. I did find some type-O errors. The word, "be" should of been, "me". Also the word, "round" was spelled or typed word. Overall I enjoyed reading it very much. It keep me interested all the way through. Keep writing.