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I really enjoyed reading your story. Kate's past history is very intriguing and I would like to know more. Tell us more about Kate and who she is. I didnt understand the phrase "my mad money", "my mad money" is that a Georgia thing? Perhaps you should clarify what that phrase means. How does Kate's rescurer know that people have been trying to reach her , could he hear the phone from where he was standing? So far you have a very intersting plot line, and I definitely want to see what you writ...

Interesting story. My one criticism other than the grammar mistakes is Tya. You dont tell us anything about Tya in the story really. Why should I care about her? sympathize with her? Why is Tya an FBI agent? Tell the readers who Tya is , and maybe they will have something else to look forward to other than a story with good action scenes. And you should be interested in your grammar problems becuase they can turn a reader off immediately.

Your poem is very well written, simple yet very complex. A suggestion for change would be: "whose voice is suppressed by a soft cushion." In sticking with the theme of a burden in your poem , which can be heavy. I feel that to use the word "soft cushion" is a contradiction. If something is suppressed something is holding it their, you try with might to keep it from reaching the surface, a soft cushion does not portray that to me. I loved the last stanza of your poem. I can definitely relate t...