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I think this needs to be longer. I liked it, it is written like a pretty good fantasy battle scene, but I'd like to see more of what is going on. There are so many elements of a fantasy world, that if you just reference things like the "Ancients War Gods", it makes it seem like every other fantasy story out there. I think if you either kept it short and removed many specific references, basically a lot of the proper pronoun stuff, or you made it longer and allowed youtrself to delve into a lo...

Haha, a story definetly written by a lady. I'd like to think men aren't that easily duped. That aside, you do a good job setting a scene, especially in the beginning when Lena tucks her shirt into her pants. Like so many other stories, this should be extended. What is it in this story that makes it worthwile to be told? People have one night stands all the time, people play silly mind games all the time. But what is it about this particular one night stand that makes it any more important tha...

This is pretty crazy stuff. I wish I had read all of the other chapters in this. There isn't much for me to say about this, I did truly enjoy it. I'm curious to see where this goes, simply because there are some places where I wouldn't want it to go, you could easily make something wonderful like this into something cliche. If anything, I'd just urge you to be very creative with how you proceed. Good work!

I think that as a piece that was designed to go with a painting, I'd need to see the painting to make an accurate criticism. I could very well see this being pretty wonderful alongside a good piece of art (painting). As for the actual poem, it was difficult for me because I had read your notes on how you don't particularly like affirmations, thus I did not know if this was supposed to be humorous or genuinely serious. That being said, however, I liked this. The rhythym in your lines is quite ...