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AGE: 100
LOC: Denver, CO
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 28

The last thing I had published was a poem called “She Leaves” in the magazine “Every Day Poets” (everydaypoets.com)
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Right now I’m workin on a novel. I don’t have a name for the novel. I have written about 70,000 words into this story, I think it’s almost written out, maybe another 10,000 words or so to go. I like to review stuff so don’t hesitate to ask if you have something you would like for me to review for you.
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24 June 2009—I made a twitter account: http://twitter.com/Scarlett156

A lot of my tweets will likely be related to writing, but I’m also gonna use it to keep people updated on the band.
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3 July 2009: “I don’t have a name for the novel.”—Shhhee… yeah, right. Actually …

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On this board the OP presents a line which must be used as the first line of the next poem. In my case the line was "a drink of molten gold". If you are anything like me the first thing that popped into your mind when you read this was a guy being forced--as a sort of torture, perhaps, or maybe some kinda insane ritual--to drink, that's right: Molten gold. (I would simply force them to drink molten copper, which is a lot cheaper and has exactly the same effect.) After that, I t...
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I'm doin it today. I've had it up to here. I've got the spaceship stocked. And the stasis pod is docked, and all charged up For at least the next few thousand years. They laughed! "Mad" and "evil" they called me! My demands were never met. This is the end! How they'll regret Denying this genius so rashly, so foolishly. I'll take the control unit With me into outer space. And once I've reached a vantage point I'll put on some tunes and smoke a joint And watch chunks o...
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--"Is the survivor alright," asked Daphne.-- Should be: "Is the survivor all right?" asked Daphne. ("Alright" is not a real word and there is incorrect punctuation at the end of the sentence.) --Daphne grasped Kelan’s right hand as the turbulence increased.-- These people are not very well-trained, or so it seems. This puts too much of a strain on the reader's belief. --Unexpectedly the RV began to stabilize. Along with the pace of their hearts.-- "Along with the pace of their hearts" is a ph...
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Short Story / Egg In The Basket
This is really a fine piece of writing here. :) Though your subject is homely and mundane, the narrative sparkles, bubbles, and sings. It overflows with warm humanity, an exultant voice that speaks to us richly of that happiness that only SEEMS rare because we so seldom really have it, but which is nonetheless accessible to all. In the last few sentences the question of what exactly has made this "just another" day so remarkable for the protagonist is answered: --Maybe it started with my frie...
Wow, you're still using present tense for everything... well, if that's your conscious choice then so be it! As long as you can stay in that tense and not switch back and forth, it's all good. The casual tone of the dialog and descriptions are at odds with your character's motive, if she's there at the restaurant to kill a guy. Whether's she's killed scores and scores of people or less than five, as a professional killer is she really going to be so blase about her assignment...? Believabilit...
Poetry / Pierce Me
You have an impressive array of words here, the subject is dramatic, and also it's admirable that you made such an effort to stick to a rhyming scheme. I think that if this poem was trimmed a little it would probably read quite nicely. Here are a few things that sort of jumped out at me: Last line of first stanza WAYYY too many words, and its meaning is a bit confused. If it was a little shorter it would fit better, and its meaning might be a bit more clear. (If someone said to me: "Have you ...
Well... I DO very much want to be nice, and I hope that the author will try to keep that in mind. I am going to say some critical things about this chapter--within the guidelines of what the author deems acceptable as criticism, of course!--but nonetheless critical. If I didn't think there was anything worthwhile at all about this work, I would have passed on it, and if the author has a problem with anything I say here, please feel free to give me a holla and demand further explanation. (I kn...
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