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LOC: Peculiar, MO
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 08
LOC: Peculiar, MO
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 08
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Kitten FREE Male, orange & white, born 4th of July 319-613-9136 Helen sighed, as she opened the newspaper and looked at the ad, in which she glanced at many times today. She still wasn't sure though. Should she? At age 56, Helen wasn't sure if she should get a kitten to take care of all by herself. But she did need a companion. Then again, a cat? Maybe a dog would be better for her. Oh, but the ad seemed to glare at her. For some strange reason, those simple 10 or so words strongly appealed ...
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This is sweet and well written, but also i wish you would say or hint what this secret was. I do like the way you wrote it though, it's very elegant.
Awwww. I'm so so sooo sorry. That's terrible that happened. But I must say this is a very good piece. I can tell you wrote it from your heart and emotions. I can't possibly even begin to manage how horrible it must be to lose your son, but in this poem you shine some light on the feeling. I could understand from the beginning that you found the hospital to be so informal and cold. Again, I'm sorry that happened, and that was a wonderful piece..
Wow. That was quite good. I started to get that this was in the afterlife just shortly after I began reading, and I had not even looked at the description yet. It is a very good interpertation of what the afterlife could be like, I never thought of it that way. I like the dialogue a lot. I can almost hear the Ferryman's voice in my head!
I really like this. It was fairly clear to me. The impression I get is that when she first approaches them, she has a not so great story and they are telling her to clean it up some. So, when she goes and cleans herself, she is actually cleaning up her story and polishing it while keeping their comments in mind. After she comes back, the reviewers likes it better and therefore they accept her as a fair writer. Good, good job. Seems like good impression to me =D.
I'm assuming that this is sort of a story of a character thinking of a child that got hit by a car. Whether it was intentional or not, i cannot tell from this poem. This was very good though, and well written. Nice decriptions, but perhaps should be more clear. Is this woman they saw the mother? Who is the character? Are they just an observer? I am not sure of some of the character's positions. Who is the man that drives up with the flowers? Otherwise I must say this is very good.
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