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AGE:
35
LOC: Jackson, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 31
LOC: Jackson, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 31
Started writing when I was in second grade and but for an experiment I called “law school,” a night in jail and three years in the Caribbean, I have not stopped…and all I have to show for it are nine short stories, three novel treatments and a half finished screenplay.
But the chicks seem to dig it when I say “I am author.”
I am moving back to the states at the end of the year, and I will have “some free time on my hands”; therefore, I will be doing what I said I would do if I had “some free time on my hands”...I will be trying to pimp out my short stories en route to publishing a novel.
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My name is Kyla Macullem. I am eight years old. I was born in Lockerbie. That is in Scotland. My brother Leith brought me to America from Scotland when I was four. It was six months after Pan Am Flight 103 crashed over Lockerbie. The crash was a caused by a terrorist bomb. The crash of Flight 103 killed 270 people, including all of the passengers and some of the citizens of Lockerbie. One of those citizens was my mother. Sometimes, I think that there are only 270 people who are ok with what h...
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As I lie in the darkness staring at my feet, I sense the entire world moving around me at an apocalyptic pace. No matter how hard I try I am left standing in cirlces, feeling as though I am experiencing events from a stationary position. It is a feeling that can only be experienced by continually reliving the mistakes of one’s life but lacking the ability to change the result. They say it is the feeling an alcoholic fosters immediately before his “moment of clarity,” the exact moment he reali...
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I really like this...very awesome concept. I's definitely a spin on an old favorite with, what I am guessing will be, a 21st Century Edge. The writing, tone and flow are all exceptional. Grammar and technical details are not my strong suit, but you look pretty good here. A few things that bother me though... Does she have to be "flipping" burgers to show that day-Haylee is not "A-list" Wouldn't a position like "gal friday" or "office assistant" be more conducive to putting Haylee in situation...
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This is a little "crowded" there is a lot going on, but not much happening if you follow me. You try to paint a vivid picture, but your words get in the way...if that makes sense. Your use of metaphor is a little disjointed. I think you may realize this, as evidenced by your need to disclose the true meaning of the story in your reader's notes. You are not far from where you want to be, but if you are going to make music a character...you need to really sell it. Just not allude to it. give mu...
Great imagery. I love this stanza... Come on Annie! Let us drench ourselves in vehemence
I am not sure I am buying into this. It's definitely a high concept, I think, having the writer's notes play a pertinent role into the story. Its almost as if you can't tell where you as the author stop and the other characters begin. While that may be what you are going for...it's somewhat confusing. Its almost as if you'd suceeded in creating a reality that you control, but the problem is that you are the only one who is in it.
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