Eights across the board for criteria. The clarity rings true with an ease of readership that is also enjoyable to read.So much so that I would have happily read on and on if it were longer. Of course you will be asked about a rhyme scheme, myself thoroughly enjoy writing a poem that rhymes and flows right through. This poem flows wonderfully and is a good read . The ending was abrupt and offered nothing more than a certain fact which closed this out perfectly. I was thinking you might change ...

This was an interesting poem. Interesting poems take me two or more reads to get a better grasp on. I read this 3 times and then decided I better read it one more time. There is a mix of complicated messages that seemed to gain new meaning or painted a different picture for me after each read. Though rather strange I liked it,and I think I was in some sunny resort retirement community when it was all said and done,on another planet. Thanks for the ride.

I'm not quite sure what to say, other than you have certainly painted a beautiful vision that opens up the imagination and keeps it open. Open to all the different directions that one could go during and after reading this wonderful work of art. I gotta' tell ya' Sandi this really moved me. Thank you for asking me to review.I will read it two or three more times to see if there is anything I might suggest to change. Wish me luck.

The underlying dryness of this piece is excellent. There is always room for a spa and a fireplace. Did you tell your husband that he could put in an outdoor kitchen if he wanted to cook. This was an enjoyable read and got my attention and kept me interested from start to finish. Good Job.

This poem made me invision you sitting on a mountain ridge at the end of a long valley, contemplating what the newness of each day might bring you.Thanks for the trip up the mountain. I liked it, keep up the good work.

The message is universal as we all know stress and dissaproval all to well. for instance people like myself changing lines and words in your work that came from your Soul and expressed without hesitation here for others to accept or dissaprove and hopefully be intelligently honest in their reasons. I really like it and hope you don't mind if I........enjoy the message and change a few lines. My life is so stressed,completly worn down I crave for acceptance, in rejection I drown The world and ...

This caught me off gaurd I must say. It took a couple of reads for me to get some understanding out of it. Is this about some one committing suicide ? The reference to losing the children and then being back home again could have used a bit more info, such as why and how they were gone and why and how they were back. Keep writing.

This isw a really nice and comfortable read. I felt as if I was in love again.warming every room just nails it at the start. very nice keep on writing have an outstanding day

In your profile you make a statement about wishing you could write. Give me a break this was great. Pushing back a bit, I look at him, then over to her, she tiptoes and cranes her neck over Mike's shoulder to kiss me. I do not hesitate. Her lips, cherry chap stick The cherry chap stick is so familiar and is perfect. This made me hard and my thoughts raced on as i read... keep up the great work

You mentioned earlier to me something about being misunderstood, this piece is so perfectly vague on top but there is no misunderstanding the underlying sordidness of it all. Especially the ending Work begins, again,in the morning. short sweet and sticky