Russell_Parkway's profile
AGE:
32
LOC: Canada
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 06
LOC: Canada
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 06
I’m trying to get my first novel off the ground like thousands of us are. I love both reading and studying movies for their characters, especially the villains, which I believe can make or break a great story. My story’s complete (for the nth time, I’ve lost count of how many rewrites I’ve done since I was 12 years old). Don’t ask me where I get my ideas from, they pop up in some of the weirdest places. My goal is to develop Pandora’s Succession, my novel, into a series. My dream is to write a screenplay one day for either Superman or X-Files movies, but I’ll just settle for getting my first book published for the time being.
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Pandora’s Succession is an espionage/thriller novel. It is 80 000 words, has been professionally edited and is a multiple submission. The story is targeted to fans of Vince Flynn and Barry Eisler. CIA operative Ridley Fox never stopped pursuing his fiancé’s killers – an illegal arms dealer called the Arms of Ares. When a scientist offers Fox the opportunity to help put Ares out of business, Fox learns of the existence of an ancient microbe called Pandora. It is believed to have destroyed anc...
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Imagine that a microbe were responsible for wiping out prehistoric civilizations. It remained dormant in the polar ice caps, until it resurfaced due to global warming. Furthermore, imagine that an arms dealer obtained a sample of this microbe and marketed it to terrorist groups bent on destroying America. In Pandora’s Succession, CIA agent Ridley Fox races to track down The Arms of Ares, an illegal arms dealer who’s suspected of unleashing a biological weapon in Southern Uganda that kills Am...
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The first paragraph is ok. What you should keep in mind is that agents are busy and once they see that the story is not polished, your query risks being tossed in the reject pile with extreme prejudice. Therefore only query once the story is complete and well polished, so that you wouldn't have to mention that in your first paragraph. It's good that you describe it but you should mention what genre the book is in. From what I read, I'm guessing that it's science fiction. That should be made c...
Hi there, Jodie. It's been a while. This story has potential. What I didn't enjoy were the grammatical errors and a few other details that will work against you if you were to present this to an agent/publisher. Here's what I found and some of the suggestions I'd look into. Once you get the idea, it should be easier for you to spot the others. First of all, what I noticed from reading many Vince Flynn novels, who uses a lot of military jargon, it's helpful for the reader to always write down ...
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