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23
LOC: Gooding, ID
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 22
LOC: Gooding, ID
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 22
I just enjoy writing anything I can. Poetry, short stories, even the odd song once in a while. Writing allows me the chanel all the ideas I have crowding my head. I came here to find some helpfull feedback on my work.
I have hopes of being published one day, but mostly what I post here is raw stuff that I’m working on.
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A grendel had come to town. I bent down and dug through a pile of personal belongings for anything usefull, nothing found; I stood up and continued on my way. The sun was a ball of searing yellow in the sky. Luckily it had remained the same in the new chaotic world. My sunglasses were a blessing from its glare. As soon as I saw the bloody partial footprint, I unslung my M4 assault rifle and checked the magazine for the third time since hearing last nights screams. I continued down the street...
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If a zombie growls in the woods, and no one is around to hear it, does it still make a noise?
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He faced me from the other end of the great marble room. We were in the dining hall where the former king could entertain 500 hundred guests and revelers at a time. It was almost a hundred yards long and half as wide. Six massive fireplaces marched along both walls, their hearths long devoid of warmth and light. The soaring arches that supported the ceiling were lost to the depthless gloom above me. The black marble floor reflected the flashes of lightning that tore across the sky outside the...
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My name is Malcolm and I want to tell you a story about life in the twenty-first century. The only way to describe what occurred ten years ago was: all hell broke loose. Magical energies reeked havoc upon the world and all the things we fear that go bump in the night, came true. Because, contrary to popular belief, magic did exist and had not disappeared from the world forever, it had just sealed itself away for no reason. Then without warning or apparent cause, all that energy came flooding ...
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The human world was home to dragons, vampires, werewolves, witches, demons, and all other manner of beings. No one knows why these creatures left the human world. But one ordinary day, dragons burst forth from dark tears in the sky, the USS Ronald Reagan, the pride of the US Navy, was torn in half by a kraken, and monsters of untold numbers simply appeared and began slaughtering innocents. People fought back, but all they did was bring more terror down on themselves when the monsters sought r...
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I've never quite heard photography described like that before. The first verse was my favorite. I enjoyed the wording about how life is taken in an instant and the lack of emotion. It creates a dark tone to the poem that caught my attention. Well done! And as an amateur photographer, well done again.
Good answer! Most people say they wouldn't repeat their mistakes, but I would. If I changed things I wouldn't have been to places I have, I wouldn't have the friends I do, and life would be a lot more boring.
You might want to change 100m into 100 meters. Just to make things more clear. When you talk about the grace of his people, you might want to rephrase it so it reads better. I found just a few minor grammar errors, but if you read through it again you'll catch them. It was a good start though, you caught my interest and held it through the entire reading. It has promise
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A good compeling prologue. The dialoge was okay, but I found just a few grammar errors, and a couple of words stuck together. If you go back through the dialoge, you'll see what I mean. Whatever event they were refering to at the begining caught my curiosity and it makes me want to read more about the details behind the story.
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