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AGE: 39
LOC: Chesapeake, VA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 12

I am a 36 year old aspiring writer from the east coast. Most of the things I post have already been copyrighted, I’m just trying to sharpen my chops before finding a literary Agent. But more importantly, My goal is to write Fun thought provoking literature.
I have a background in technical writing, drafting, etc. I am currently enjoying my creative side, writing fiction, and poetry.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Assymetry
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Novel Treatments / Asymmetry 2
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_I gotta stop smoking._ Rankin was winded after climbing the fabled hundred marble steps to the entrance of the Wormwood Hotel. The grav-slide stopped working decades ago. He grimaced as Beatrix marched up the steps without a hint of fatigue. Rankin paused to catch his breath in the motel’s 80-foot high atrium. Most of the decent tenants loathed the cracked and fading paint, graffiti and garbage-strewn corridors of this once luxurious Hotel, but not Rankin, he enjoyed the flawed interior, be...
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Novel Treatments / Witness
by andersda
The first paragraph confused me. The allegory of the apple and worm being an allegory to taking the good with the bad was clear. But the setup was a slight bit incoherent. Inserting the last line "I got all the sweetness from the fruit, etc" behind the first sentence of the first paragraph would make it read smoother. The 2,3,4 graphs were superb. More description would have set things up more clear. "Watching him choke down.." Tall him? short him? Still, powerful imagery. Your descriptive pr...
Non-fiction / Chicano
by squarehopper
Your story is inspirational. And to be essentially self-taught in English and other sciences is commendable. I loved the economic use of language in this piece. No wasted words. Watch out for shifts in sentence tense. IE Past, Present, Future. When referring to the past. Use past tense: Rephrase--> Thirty-odd years ago I attended James Hedges Elementary School and the influence of the education I gained there is still evident in my life. I now speak and write English as if it were my first...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Sometimes The English Patient and Nachos Don't Mix.
by oknapp
I thoroughly enjoyed this work. There were a few spelling errors: Faucet and Whore master: but that is what a spellchecker is for. Your blog definitely held my interest and I wanted to read more. The mixed and strained emotional/mental ordeal of sharing time with your old flame Matt was vividly described. The movie theater dialogue filled with humor and authenticity was choice.
Novel Treatments / Winter Solstice Ch2: Blood and Drugs
by DC_Karma
Early on, I noted repeated use of words, like "within its walls". Which could distract from the descriptive narrative. Your writing is concise. As a new reader to this second chapter I had no problem figuring out what was going on. Exposition of Gilbert/the vampire lore was excellent. The line on page 4.."There is not the equivalent of a vegetarian for us.” read funny to me. Maybe a shorter phrase would work like, "Vampire Vegans do not exist." I loved how Tara explained being blood-drunk. It...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / No matter where you go, There you are
by Proser
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