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AGE: 99
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 23

“Before you can see the light, you have to deal with the darkness…”


About me:  I am a hopeless dark romantic; angels and gargoyles; a ghost who floats in between but never in the now; everything and nothing; a paradox searching endlessly in the shadowy void for what she cannot find.

About me artistically:  I find more beauty lurking in the darkness and the shadows than in the everyday mundane life.  This darkness is reflected in my writing, poetry and photography.

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Poetry / Late Night Date
Version 5
7 Reviews   0 Comments
Beloved you are mine until the end of time. Your whisper faint upon my ear, I held you close, calming fear promising eternity divine. Dearest darling now so dead dripping drops of red drape across your face, eternal love is grace - unfortunately, I prefer you dead. A horrid thing to do, I should not have lied to you. Such an easy mark walking alone in the dark, alas, what could this girl do? Except drop you to the ground, silent now, I search around. In the air, your heady scent hangs impatie...
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Poetry / the last dance
Version 1
14 Reviews   15 Comments
in this bloody masquerade of life alone and yet together close and yet apart does one plus one equal two or does it simply add up to nothing before we submerge back from whence we came nothing more than a bloody respite played from the same refrain in the tune of life
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Poetry / Late Night Date
Version 4
3 Reviews   3 Comments
Beloved you are mine until the end of time. Your whisper faint upon my ear, I held you close, calming fear with promises of eternity divine. Dearest darling now so dead dripping drops of red drape across your face, eternal love is grace - unfortunately, I prefer you dead. A horrid thing to do, I should not have lied to you. Such an easy mark walking alone in the dark, alas, what could this girl do? Except drop you to the ground, silent now, I search around. In the air, your heady scent hangs ...
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Poetry / Sapphire Life
Version 5
5 Reviews   3 Comments
searching for anything that will let her feel _(we are here for you)_ spiraling out of control teetering on the brink she takes one step further away from the last shred of hope that binds her to this existence _(no one is coming to save you)_ the color black cannot convey how hollow inside _(come closer . . . listen)_ playing hopscotch she dances over the jagged edge once more does she secretly pray she will slip and fall tumbling into the oblivion residing within herself (she closes her eye...
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Poetry / Sapphire Life
Version 4
0 Reviews   0 Comments
searching for anything that will let her feel _(we are here for you)_ spiraling out of control teetering on the brink she takes one step further away from the last shred of hope that binds her to this existence _(no one is coming to save you)_ the color black cannot convey how hollow inside _(come closer . . . listen)_ playing hopscotch she dances over the jagged edge once more does she secretly pray she will slip and fall tumbling into the oblivion residing within herself (she closes her eye...
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Poetry / She's a River
This is beautiful and you have a talent for the musical lilt of wording poetry that I love. My favorite lines (which I found brilliant - especially the first): Pour me a cup of caffeine induced laughter Flow on my dear I would try and eliminate some of the extra words that aren't really needed - such as - the, a, to, it, etc. Your line breaks are a bit unusual, are they intentional? Sometimes we want our words in a specific style on purpose. Here is an example of eliminating extra words: Try ...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Lyrcrist -- Tree [descriptive]
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Poetry / In Love
I have written some very short poems as well. I don't view it as the length of the poem, rather the quality of the words and what they convey. I like your poem and I think it stands very well as is. The only thing I would suggest is to add punctuation to help convey the flow. Nice job.
I'm not sure if you fit into young adult - I thought that category was 17 and under. I know you stated a lot of words were intentionally spelled wrong to convey their way of speaking - but you need to readdress the other misspellings. For example you have a lot of its that should be it's. You need to cap the first word of every line of speaking text. A few examples of changes -Do you think he sells them to 'You’ve Been Framed' or something?” -don't cap the word fu** I like the story and I fin...