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LOC: United Kingdom
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LAST LOGIN: November 16

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Short Story / The Silver box
Version 1
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The sealed box had no lock or key. It had a smooth silver finish (after I’d spent a whole day polishing it of course!). I’d found it buried under three feet of mud and sand whilst digging a hole to bury the dead snake. The box had no markings or inscriptions, other than a silver hallmark and a few scratches and dents from being buried. I’d wondered where it had come from, seeing as the house had been in my family for years, and to my knowledge, my sisters and my children had...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Time Stopped
Version 10
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  The Time-Keeper’s tale                   ..........................   Time stopped.   Just for a split-second, so that it wasn’t enough for anyone to notice. And even if they did, it was put down to absent-mindedness. People just suddenly forgot what they were doing and simply re-traced their steps to remember.   Just a split second, which nobody would have missed? &n...
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Short Story / Restless Planets.
Version 2
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Part 1: The Earth breathed a huge sigh of relief. It was such a huge sigh, that it created earthquakes, tsunamis and volcanic eruptions, which would have hit a 12 on the Richter scale, had man still been alive. The demise of all mankind, and all other forms of life on earth, had been the reason for her sigh of relief. Mankind had nearly killed her with pollution. When mankind killed every other single living organism, including plants, animals, amoebas, germs, bacteria and jellyfish, she had ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Time Stopped (Ch1&2)
Version 9
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The Time-Keeper’s tale .......................... Time stopped. Just for a split-second, so that it wasn’t enough for anyone to notice. And even if they did, it was put down to absent-mindedness. People just suddenly forgot what they were doing and simply re-traced their steps to remember. Just a split second, which nobody would have missed? So then, why did one small being notice it? Perhaps it was because he was THE ultimate time-keeper. The Ultimate time-keeper was known to his friends an...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Time Stopped
Version 6
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The Time-Keeper’s tale .......................... Time stopped. Just for a split-second, so that it wasn’t enough for anyone to notice. And even if they did, it was put down to absent-mindedness. People just suddenly forgot what they were doing and simply re-traced their steps to remember. Just a split second, which nobody would have missed? So then, why did one small being notice it? Perhaps it was because he was THE ultimate time-keeper. The Ultimate time-keeper was known to his friends an...
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with the transferrence from part 9 to part 10, you say 'she turned over' but as this is a new segment, it would be a lot clearer if you used her name again, otherwise it seems like you are continuing the flow from 9 to 10, and it confused me because she goes from sitting by the fire with one guy, to waking up in bed looking for her husband. you might also want to put a small sentence from her saying goodnight or something, just to clarify that it is now changing to a new scene. It also concer...
Non-fiction / Waiting
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Novel Treatments / Democracy
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Graveyard Shift
I like the quote you added! It gives an interesting start to it, and pulls the reader in right away. I also love the market place, which I dont think was there before. I love this version, its more detailed than the first one, and now the rest of it makes more sense! I enjoyed reading it, hehe. Its clever the way you've linked all religions and afterlife beliefs into one big world. I can't think of anything else to say, and I have no criticisms, but I really like it :-)
Short Story / The Collectors: Zebediah
I like this story, I think it has a lot of potential to go on a bit more. It did remind me a lot of stephen king's Insomnia (Guy called ralph visited by 3 agents of death). But I still think that you could expand more upon the collectors and why they collect! :-)
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Raven
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Akrakt
Sci Fi & Fantasy / A Death to Remember
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Messiah Complex Ch. 1

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