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AGE:
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LOC: North Bennington, VT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 06
LOC: North Bennington, VT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: March 06
A Vermonter since 1972, Shawn MacKENZIE, a k a Pogopaws, is the author of “The Care & Feeding of Dragons” and “In the Company of Unicorns,” both which were to be published this past year but, due to breaches on the part of her publisher, they are now seeking a new home with a new publishing house. She has two short stories, “Thorn Soup” and “Lost Among the Tuna Trees,” in the anthology, “Southshire Pepper-Pot,” published by Lion’s Mark Press. She shares her life with 6 cats, a parrot, a mouse, a hamster, Willow the Chinchilla, and whatever mystical beings graciously include her in their ken. Her website www.mackenziesdragonsnest.com is a fun place to visit—all are welcome.
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Prelude: A Brief History of Asru-Nai. The Earth was dying. Not now, not here. Not the Earth we see up in the night sky, but the Earth of our ancestors, long ago and realities away. The Earth we now call Ælom Jun. For those of you interested in dates and timelines, in the minutia of the past, all the steps that brought us to this place, this point, there are detailed volumes in the Central Archives. For the rest who have no patience, no wish to wade through such elaborate narratives, here is t...
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Prelude: A Brief History of Asru-Nai. The Earth was dying. Not now, not here. Not the Earth we see up in the night sky, but the Earth of our ancestors, long ago and realities away. The Earth we now call Ælom Jun. For those of you interested in dates and timelines, in the mi-nutia of the past, all the steps that brought us to this place, this point, there are detailed volumes in the Central Archives. For the rest who have no patience, no wish to wade through such elaborate narratives, here is ...
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Much better. I get a clearer sensene of the novel without getting swamped by minutia. Like the lambent light returning with just enough ambiguity to raise one's interest. A couple of blue pencil points: "Visited by a glowing light in his dreams and a dramatic vision, Rod becomes convinced of his divinity." TRY: "Visited in his breams by a glowing light and a dramatic vision..." "new minister of music at church" sounds more LARGE church than small church. I'd just say "the new minister" and le...
Sounds like a fascinating story (novella?); one I certainly would read. From a query letter standpoint a few thoughts: "As The Lambent Light (70,000 words) is a true, graphic story of sexual abuse in small-church USA, the novel is sure to generate free publicity." I would take the opening of this sentence and start your letter with it. "The Lambent Light (70,000 words) is a graphic story of sexual abuse in small-church USA. My protagonist, Rod McKnight is a pubescent fourteen-year-old growing...
Interesting start for a ballad; but I feel it's incomplete. Folk songs tend to fall into two catagories: story ballads, like those Child so carefully collected; and what might be considered spiritual or political folk songs, a la Leadbelly and Pete Seeger and Woody. I realize that is a gross generalization, but as you seem leaning towards the first catagory, I wanted to know more of the story. Who was the boy, who was the beast???? Why pary to Ol' Nick? Interesting questions you inspire but l...
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