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LOC: Flowery Branch, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 23
LOC: Flowery Branch, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 23
I have decided that I WILL NOT, review anymore poems, they are mostly worth 15 credits, and people get to upset when you can’t leave a 300 word review on a 68 word poem. easy enough to fix. Besides I like a real story, something I can sink my teeth into.
I’ve been silenced for far to long. My writings are not alway the easiest to read. Most will bring up sorrow or pity in the reader. That’s really not what I am looking for. I know alot of my stuff is sad, depressing even been called tearjerkers, but that is what I have to say and I am going to say it. I just want honest opinions on the way it is written and if I should continue with my stories and poems.
I have had some interest in my book. people have said i…
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INTRODUCTION So this is where I tip off the reader that I am indeed certifiable! Yes I am crazy, depressed, sad, even a whole lot twisted. This little blurb about myself makes me laugh a little, no chuckle out loud; no I think I will roll around on the floor in hysterics over this! This is how sane I am? This isn't a story about a happy childhood or even a story of eve...
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So I scream and I cry, Why? Will help it bring me back? Will it make me love you harder? Will it make me care deeper? Will it bring me back? Will it make you care deeper? Will it make you love me harder? Bring me back! Will that make me scream and cry? I have no needs!! I have only wants!! Do you know whay I want? I want you to scream for me! I want you to cry for me! Am I back? I want you to love me harder! I want you to care deeper! Are you sure I'm back? Will you scream and cry FOR me? Ple...
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I know he can see the sorrow in my eyes It's a pain I can not hide With all these tearful good-byes I'm just along for the ride How long has it been since I held you Was it just yesterday, I felt your loving touch Do you know what it is I go through I long to strenghen this bond so much You are now woven into the very tapestry I call my soul Slowly repairing the frayed edges I call fears With every thread,carefully in its roll Please mend all that tore apart my heart for years &...
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I don’t know why I am here . ” Dad where did mommy go?” When I say dad, I mean Barry. I didn’t know my real dad at this point, or didn’t remember him.. I vaguely recognize the other men in the room, except for my uncle. They are my dad’s relatives and cousins, I think he said . He has so many I can never remember which is which. ...
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“Here take this” Tone said. I think, 'fuck this is it, this is big. He really trusts me now.' He shoves the wadded up shirt in hands. I could feel it, hard, cold, through the rolls of fabric. I knew what it was. I knew I shouldn’t take it. But I craved his attention and affection, so I did. I wanted to belong to his little group, his gang or posse if you will. I wantged to feel accepted by ...
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I love the way you don't out right say what this treasure is, leads the reader to make of it what they will. I personally like to think the treasure is knowledge. You set such beautiful imagery like with this line...Hidden like dark stars to a gaze Concealed is the beauty of this coveted prize Only he that seeks fortune eternally Trying to accomplish endless endeavors Shall be the one to finally obtain This one impossible treasure.... very thought provoking. what could this treasure be.
Grant me reach deep within you (and) touch places only God knows of and drink your very essence into me.... change (and) to (to) just my opinion I think it flows better. Wow fantastic, you specifically asked to tell you who it made me feel. well here goes. It reminds me of what a lover wants of their beloved. 'Let me know you the way the gracious oak’s roots know the fertile soil it embraces.' this line is strong, I mean it brings forth feelings of such strength. the mighty oak, you could not...
For starters the random bold and italic words really make this difficult to read this piece. Billions of atoms collided (with in) the heavy particle accelerators. (within) one word Guided by powerful magnetic fields, (by products) were concentrated and compressed within the barrel of the cannon. (byproducts) one word (OBLITERATED) the entire mass of metal. no need for capitalization here, use an exclamation point instead. ok I have not read the other chapters so I have no idea what the VOLETT...
I have the sway to slip my mind (in to) your silken sheeted bed..into should be one word. other then that It was perfect I loved it. I create that moist glimmer between your tender, so extraordinarily silky thighs such vivid sensual imagery. Nicely done and without vulgarity. no an easy thing to do. I very rarely rate 10's on anything, you've earned 'em. And I just swore off reviewing poetry, I think you have just restored my faith in poets.
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