Wow is all I can say. This is rich with descriptions of a lovely place for a child to grow up and watch the march of time. Should be a novel. Should be more of it to read. Are you going to write more?

Can't tell much from this short piece, but the writing's good. The descriptions of the thiungs and the fight works well. I would like more description of the muggers. Can't picture them in my mind. Keep writing.

Funny. I chuckled. Isn't that the truth.

A hopeful poem on love inviting us to become a subject for a potentiual masterpiece. An intriguing idea.

Cute play on words liked the first part poetics unite us & ethics cum. Think it should be longer- it seems like it was over before it got started- it felt undone- not yet ready, knowwhatimean?

Very funny. I think it would work well in a magazine. It's easy to read, humorous, and not too long- can be read easily in a few minutes. Do likethe part where you list the places where eep will never be recorded, and the part about the foootball game. Very nice. I liked it.

I admit it- I haven't read your preceeding chapters-but I hope you'll take to my thoughts any way- I liked the introduction of the telling the slanted truth- to hide a lie. The character sketch in that part was excellent. The teacher, Mrs. Snyder, is enough of a school marm to summon up dread in any reader. I do likethe descriptions ofthe wad of spit stuck on her face, and her slowly wiping it off. It works. The last part seemed not to fit so smoothly with the first- the last few pages discuc...

Ok you edit quickly- and it's good. I do like the part you've added where you write that eep will not be positively reinforced. and you mention how women will distain a male who eeps,(that part being particularly sensitive) and then you gush over with memories of the eeper and become one yourself. Nice twist.

I like the covered in dust line, but for me the question at the end left me empty. I felt like the title should have given me a clue before the end of the poem what the subject really was. Originally I thought you were wrting about a key:)

Cute. In a goofy sort of soft way.