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AGE: 20
LOC: San Diego, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 04

College in San Diego. Psychology major. Write poetry to express thoughts and cure pain.

I have an amazing best friend. Love. Basketball. Family. Friends. This is what defines me.

I aspire to be a lyricist someday. Even if just one song is used… it’s my dream.

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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Proposition 8
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It's an initiative looking to free all sexual orientations from discrimination. Sexual orientation is not so relevant as what type of person they are, their character, their personality, and they way in which they carry themself in the world. It does not define a person. It should not, therefore, limit an individual in any way. Everyday there are people all around the world that get married, only to be divorced a time later. Whether it be days, months, years. And here there are people fully ...
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It's my eyes that want to speak the truth, but it's my mouth that cant help but lie to you. It's become the epitome of my youth: I lie for the sake of lying, no intent to harm you. I lie to tell a story. I lie to simply amuse. I lie when i don't have to. i lie i lie to you. You call expecting the truth but my answer is only a ruse. I am deceptive unnecessarily; maybe i wouldn't be if you didn't insist on smothering me. No one needs to know exactly where i am: If all you care about is my well ...
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Lyrics / You Should Know
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Here I am and there you are. I can't understand why we are so far apart. here i am and there you are. i'm left grasping for the other half of my heart. down the road i ought to know by now following the same routine that is somehow now failing laughter fades oh i try to fight it it invades and i can't hide it i'm left with emptiness. your smile invaded my whole being pumped feeling through my empty veins. indecision (courses) through me you took everything i need and just left me-- what's lef...
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Oh, I’ve found the key to this euphoria. So, what i strive to see is the reality of the dream that is you and me. (musical intro-lude) I am not ashamed, relatives are to blame for the silence. I do not care, but blood won’t let me share my heart’s truth. I should say, but i dont dare-- dare to defy-- closed minds and blind eyes. Closed to the idea of change blind to the beauty. It’s only a secret if we can keep it, keep it quiet. (Hush hush, we gotta be quiet) How much longer must i deny it? ...
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Poetry / Redefining Love
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Let's spend an eternity Redefining love let's get to know each other each and every curve You make life worth living. Despite all i take you are always giving: Giving me hope, a reason to smile; giving me faith to walk down the aisle. When it comes to you i questioned my worth. All that you are is more than i deserve. Well that was before because you've made me see more (in myself) than i ever knew to be. through your trust and guidance you've made me want more-- (than ever before) to be bett...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / you wake up...
This was an awesome entry. it was the type of piece that as i read it i found myself nodding in agreement all throughout. it was not only overall relate-able material, but it presented concepts that people think and feel on an every day basis in an eloquent and easy to read way. it was very well written. it represented the monotony of office lifestyle in a way that made in nostalgic and comedic at the same time. good job and thanks for the entry.
Poetry / Final Moment
it's a very subtle yet powerful piece. the wording is not overly strong or dramatic, but that seems to be advantageous for this piece. it seems to me to be nonchalant wording for a dramatic and intense topic. this, to me, is effective in conveying the proper emotions. good job.
Poetry / 8 a.m.
i loved this piece. the ending leaves me wanting a little more. i actually think this could easily work as an effective quick-witted spunky little song. the wording is fun and intriguing. very good job overall. hope to hear more. consider lyric writing.
Poetry / When I Learned
the second to last stanza, to me, seemed out of place and slightly irrelevant. i appreciated the piece as a whole but am not sure how well it flows as a poetic piece. it almost reads better as more of a rythmic and sensual story. the third to last stanza reads as a run on sentence, so in that respect, more punctuation is necessary. some of the repetition of the word "first" is necessary, but still feels slightly over-used. maybe it could be substituted for a different word at times. overall, ...
i really loved the first four lines of your chorus. i was definitely curious as to what genre of music you intend to set this to. the only thing... the stanza starting with "you grew and grew" didn't quite make sense to me, specifically the third line. I'd definitely hope to hear more on your intentions for the meaning and reasoning for the specific wording. good luck until then.
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