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AGE: 59
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 19

Altarwise by owl light in the halfway house
The gentleman lay gravewards with his furies ..Dylan Thomas
    
    

I learn  a lot by reviewing work. The faults I find, like repetition and cliches are often faults in my own work!
I’ve now removed all chapters of my novel from the internet… I found that the sheer flattery of having people read my efforts resulted in me bathing on my laurels and not actually getting on with the serious business of writing.Thankyou to all of you who have helped me.
Love ya all!

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Poetry / Placid in the Vortex of Endeavour
Version 6
6 Reviews   11 Comments
Placid in the vortex of endeavour; Creation will not happen without tears. The hordes will always try to stop the flow; Barbed, spiked advice from experts who don't know And mealy-mouthed destruction of ideas. Placid in the vortex of endeavour; Calm solitude a friend of every hour; Enemies pose as obsequious peers. The hordes will always try to stop the flow. Jealous missiles of hate make spirits low. Vitriol sprays poison the wildflower. Placid in the vortex of endeavour Achilles strikes; le...
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Poetry / Oh Fock! Writer's Block
Version 4
2 Reviews   4 Comments
  Oh Fock! Writer's block. It's what all writers fear. My problem is the opposite; It's verbal diarrhoea. In Dickens-Hardy-Austen times They wrote it with a pen. If something didn't sit quite right They crossed it out again. Graham Greene and Hemingway Typed books in hard copy. They scrubbed or tipexed anything That looked a little sloppy. Me, I'm like that Stephen King With lap-top on my knee. Insert, page down, cut, paste, delete; 10k in a jiffy. My other great fault is my squirrely tr...
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Poetry / The Constipated Poet
Version 1
2 Reviews   9 Comments
The Constipated Poet I'm a constipated poet and I'm nearly going mental. A constipated mathematician Would work it out with a pencil. If someone cannot spell the words They say they are word blind. My problems with my words today Are coming from behind. I've thought and thunk and drunk and thunk And thunk and drunk some more. My faithfull incontinent Dane Is lying on the floor. Oh! What's that smell? Well bloody hell! She's crapped as is her habit. I race downstairs to fetch the rags And tri...
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Flash Fiction / The Celebrated Doctor Joseph Cruz
by squarehopper
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Short Story / The Hasty Highway
by stephw
Acronyms need to be written in full because your readers may not know. Calgary gave a clue that you were in Canada so RCMP was OK but might not have been for everybody. NHL is something I don't know. I also have no idea of the significance of a number 99 on a shirt. I think you need to either decide who your target audience is and write for them having put that info in your reviewer notes or write for a general audience but take care to explain everything. The suspense after the vulnerable yo...
Action Adventure / Pandora's Succession
by Russell_Parkway
The Title needs some sort of explanation. like a oneline synopsis in the reviewer's notes. pistol whipping is at the back of the neck so why would he have a bruise on his head? he must have fallen against something hard. you need to say this. some of the dialogue is daft. like Fox saying that they took his weapons. of course they did. This whole piece is written awkwardly and zigzags about. the events need to be in better chronological order. Take the first paragraph. 1. blow 2. fell 3.cold 4...
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Short Story / Garden of Saint Eulalia
by caravans
I like the title. Never heard of that Saint..sets the piece in somewhere Spanish-speaking straightaway and promises interest. You describe a man as homeless because he is asleep in the churchyard. Unless Patrick already knows this is a fact, this is an assumption. He would probably be completely covered so his sex would also be an assumption...nitpicky but it's important to get the start of a piece absolutely right. Perhaps you could do it another way..despite...describe the sleeper also desp...
Horror / Tainted Spirits: Chapter 2
by AnthonyT
lots of women dress like this. You can't decide their sexual orientation by their appearance. They would have to do something.They were fully dressed. Why would Liz assume this? It's too quietly, matter-of-factly assumed, so the reader immediately argues with the writing when the reader needs to be arguing with the character's quick assumption. You have to write the content of your reader's notes somehow into the piece. ie that Liz is quick to assume with little evidence. So build on what Liz...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
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