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AGE: 21
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 26

Among the subjects I love are Psychology, Anthropology, Nanotechnology, US/UK Military and Intelligence Operations of the 20th/21st Century, History, Politics,  Philosophy & Quantum Physics.

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Limericks / Limerick Of "Freedom"
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*Limerick Of “Freedom”* There was an old man named Bush, Whose brain had all turned into mush, And one day whilst on crack Said “Lets invade Iraq” But the public, they needed a push. Now Bush had a friend named Blair, And one day to him did declare, “Tony my Friend, Help me kick some rear end, And the spoils of the war we’ll both share.” Now Tony’s a Christian man, But he liked George’s devious plan, To bomb their own guys, And say the blame lies, With Osama from Afghanistan. When Osama had h...
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22:09 10 May 2007 3382 American men & women have died during the war in Iraq… Sounds just like another statistic right? I’ll write it again, 3382. So lets put that in perspective. Scroll down these dots. …….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….……….………………….……….……….……….……….……….……...
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Poetry / My Advice
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My Advice Try to keep your guard up When all around looks well, Try to keep your strength up When it all goes straight to hell, Try to keep your quiet When your feeling so intense Try to keep your logic When nothings making sense Try to keep your friends close, When the distances are great Try to keep them closer When you feel you're in a state Try to keep your temper When the ice starts wearing thin Try to keep yourself calm When it breaks and you fall in Try to keep your courage, When fight...
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http://www.defensetech.org/ Numerous articles on current weapon trials from different countries (predominately US) and check out the “Less Lethal” page for news on the wacky ranges of non-lethal weapons currently in development. http://www.theblackvault.com/ A database of US and UK government files obtained under the Freedom Of Information Act (FOIA). An interesting and incredibly valuable research point for any writer who wants to get dug in behind the official stories and see what really ha...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Resources For Action/Thriller Writers
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http://www.defensetech.org/ Numerous articles on current weapon trials from different countries (predominately US) and check out the "Less Lethal" page for news on the wacky ranges of non-lethal weapons currently in development. http://www.theblackvault.com/ A database of US and UK government files obtained under the Freedom Of Information Act (FOIA). An interesting and incredibly valuable research point for any writer who wants to get dug in behind the official stories and see what really ha...
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Short Story / You Can Be Lawrence
A story which, although at times heartwrenching and emotionally complex, left me feeling very satisfied. To cover the lesser problems quickly, you have a few paragraphing errors, in one sentence you spelt "then" as "tehn" and I think theres a grammatical error in the first paragraph (Chill-Chilly?) but I'm not too sure on that last one. As for the critique on the story, its beautifully written, and perfect for a Lit. Mag or collection of short stories. I think that the dream sequence at the s...
Poetry / Essence of Time
Well, given what happened in Montreal the other day I felt this one struck home a little hard. But it was very well written and as a thriller writer I liked the description you used to create a sort of "Bullet-time" scene around the firing of a gun, while including the personal feelings involved. Very impressed. 9/10
Action Adventure / Prelude to 911 chapter 1
I think this has alot of potential to really flourish into a good action/thriller. You've got an interesting story-line and characters, but you move very quickly through alot of their dialogue and I think you might lose a certain sense of character and story-line interest through that. You are Telling the story, but your not showing it to your reader enough. Use the senses more, talk about the smell of the jet. Or the way one of the characters moves and link a story to it about a past wound, ...
Novel Treatments / Crusade
Okay, I like the idea and the basic storyline but theres a couple of things you could change. One is the paragraph structure of the piece, seperate it out and shorten some sentences to make it easier on the eye. Its hard to entirely focus on a description or plot development when you keep getting lost in long sentences, its like looking for wood among trees. The second is the language used, if this is a conversation or dialogue via letters or just a monologue you must think very carefully abo...
Brutally honest but very heartfelt, brilliant quote though. But, I know this is going to sound like the most pedantic thing in the world, however, its spelt "ashamed", as one word, not two. But like I said, brilliant quote, speaks real honesty and is the kind of thing I'd use to convey mixed emotions of a man towards his wife or parents, did you make this one up yourself? 10/10