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AGE:
22
LOC: Commerce City, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 25
LOC: Commerce City, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 25
I have been writing since I was a young child.
I was born in Chicago, but i grew up in the country.
My first novel Eternal Awakening: Dawn of Hope will be coming out June 3, 2008
My website is http://oneternity.googlepages.com
I came to urbis so that I can see other literature from around the world. I love reading
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You showed emotion and the grammar was perfect, I couldnt find anything wrong with it. Your word choicing was supurb.
Is your enemy, yourself or someone else? Thats the only thing i didnt get. The poem was great including hte wording.
In this poem you greatly display what parents struggle day to day to accomplish. All good parents attempt to help there children, but they understand that there is a limit to how far they can help them but regardless they will try. This would be a great children's poem, or book.
The poem was excellent, but the title doesnt fit it. The title doesnt sound orignal like your poem. Reminds me of the song "Should i stay or should i go" Other than the title i think poem was gould. You dont have to change the last line in order to change the title. Event though they say the same thing.
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