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AGE: 45
LOC: Willoughby, OH
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LAST LOGIN: August 19

41 year old trying my hand at sci-fi

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Panchetti Epoch Chapter 1 second excerpt c2006
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“Pop, what happens if the Doctor gets sick?” asked a six-year-old little girl. “Then they’d all be in trouble.” “Why don’t they have two doctors?” “Well, my little Joey, which bloke should they pull from the expedition?” “Um, I don’t know. O hope they keep Lance! You gotta have a mechanic.” “Right you are!” The Doctor cut in. “I have to start tucking everyone away in their sarcophagi, so I will turn over the camera to Mikhail Tourophski.” He spoke in Russian, and subtitles came in as fast as...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Panchetti Epoch Chapter 1 second excerpt c2006
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“Pop, what happens if the Doctor gets sick?” asked a six-year-old little girl. “Then they’d all be in trouble.” “Why don’t they have two doctors?” “Well, my little Joey, which bloke should they pull from the expedition?” “Um, I don’t know. O hope they keep Lance! You gotta have a mechanic.” “Right you are!” The Doctor cut in. “I have to start tucking everyone away in their sarcophagi, so I will turn over the camera to Mikhail Tourophski.” He spoke in Russian, and subtitles came in as fast as...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Panchetti Epoch Chapter 1 second excerpt c2006
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“Pop, what happens if the Doctor gets sick?” asked a six-year-old little girl. “Then they’d all be in trouble.” “Why don’t they have two doctors?” “Well, my little Joey, which bloke should they pull from the expedition?” “Um, I don’t know. O hope they keep Lance! You gotta have a mechanic.” “Right you are!” The Doctor cut in. “I have to start tucking everyone away in their sarcophagi, so I will turn over the camera to Mikhail Tourophski.” He spoke in Russian, and subtitles came in as fast as...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Excerpt from chapter 1 of Panchetti Epoch c2006
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1 : Space Age Wednesday, April 15, 2043 Michael McConnae sat down in front of his television after a hard day at the shop. He sipped a beer as his four-year-old daughter played with a plastic toolbox, and a kitchen set. She was pretending to fix the oven as she had seen her dad do a couple weeks back. She had done this every day since she had handed dad the tools he asked for. The news cut over to a special report. “We are witnessing a test of the new propulsion system that might make it pos...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Excerpt from chapter 1 of Panchetti Epoch c2006
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1 : Space Age Wednesday, April 15, 2043 Michael McConnae sat down in front of his television after a hard day at the shop. He sipped a beer as his four-year-old daughter played with a plastic toolbox, and a kitchen set. She was pretending to fix the oven as she had seen her dad do a couple weeks back. She had done this every day since she had handed dad the tools he asked for. The news cut over to a special report. “We are witnessing a test of the new propulsion system that might make it poss...
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Flash Fiction / Medic
by derekosborne
Your writing is choppy. Simple sentences, and statements make reading choppy. add complex sentences that combine the small statements so that they relate. "And" is not what I mean. While, as, but, though, even when, there, where, and many more are what I suggest. It is good to add the short statement in the reading, but it should not make up the bulk. Give your characters names so they are not so impersonal. The main character is going to know who he is anyway unless he has never met him befo...
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Poetry / Fading
by fendereff
What I seem to get out of this is that you are talking about the ups and downs of emotion. One of happiness to the depths of depression and back out...almost the statement of a bipolar person. I also can see the possibility of the onset of menopause. It could be that complex...I cannot relate, but some can. or it could be as simple as the turning of the seasons. For someone who is going through the same thing, this would hit home with them. Overall a good start.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Undetermined
by DarkHuntress
light as a feather, but weighty as lead. -> Light as a feather, and at the same time as dense as lead. teased his long-dead emotions -> awoke...revived... Alara Smith, university librarian. How was he able to get this information? Please watch that this does not fall into the same Vampire falls in love with the victim. There are already too many stories with that synopsis. You should provide more detail about the characters to make them more interesting, and human, and fallible. The wri...
Horror / The Willows (Chapter 2)
by MartinBlack
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Quotes / The broken path
by Gavinswar
Your book...heh... If this is a dark character within your book, it says a lot about who he is, and his ignorance. I have just read a poem written by a soldier who has killed the enemy in Iraq, and the poem pretty much talked about the damage that the killing has done to his heart. If this is what your character is, then it is perfect for him to say that. Good luck
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