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AGE: 20
LOC: Cordova, TN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 21

My name is John and I like waterfalls.  

I prefer to write small, simple poems that explore larger, more intelligent themes.  Similar to the poetry of William Carlos Williams, yet maybe more involved.

My stories are usually marked by high detail on seemingly unimportant things.  However, my stories are simply groupings of perspectives and observations that create a final, complex, or conflicted revelation.

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Poetry / Love
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I love the sound of glass soda  bottles clinking together in a brown paper bag.   I love the touch of cold water against the back  of my hot red skin.   I love the sight of my reflection in the light  blue eye of a beautiful woman.   I love the taste of fresh strawberries picked with my hands in my garden.   I love the smell of warm stew cooking after playing in the cold wet snow.   I love the joys of living in a flawed but perfect w...
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Poetry / Mistake
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I put myself in another's place yesterday.   I saw many things that I did not wish to see.   I do not think that I will do that again.   It was too unpleasant.
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Poetry / Writing this
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Writing this, I realize    that It will be   revised,   ripped,   rewritten,   stressed over,   cursed at,   incinerated,   mocked,   thrown away,   laughed at,   stabbed,   talked to,   and serve   as a continual   source of    frusturation--   All in just   one day.   And yet   perfect   anyway.
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Mommy! There’s a monster! Come quick! I know it’s here! I can feel it’s evil presence. I can feel it  drawing near. And though  I may not see it crawling,  oozing on the floor. I insist that  it must be there for I’ve heard it’s vile roar. I can smell  it’s putrid odor, for it lingers  in the air. Mommy! There’s a monster! Mommy? Are you there?
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Poetry / Carl
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  Carl! Don’t do that! Don’t touch that! Don’t play with that! Don’t say that! Carl! Get a job! Get a car! Get a girl! Get a life! Carl! Stop swearing! Stop smoking! Stop drinking! Stop whining! Carl! Don’t jump!    
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I think you have a unique interesting style here. Less focus on your style and more on the story though. Keep up the good work.
Poetry / PARTY DREAM
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Tucson, all 3 excerpts...
Your plot and theme are done well and clear but your writing leaves something to be desired. Honestly I just felt like it was taking a little too long. Don't make it too short but take out some unnecessary descriptions. And I wont say it was boring but spice it up a bit. Be succinct but witty. otherwise good job.
Novel Treatments / Veil of Darkness - Chapter 2
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