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AGE: 17
LOC: Calera, OK
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 30

Happiness.
Pure and simple,
It’s all I ask,
Of you, Of them,
Of me.

www.freewebs.com/bunnibug91 – I put my writing up on my website, not for reviewing but for reading pleasure. If you get bored, and you feel like just reading for fun, check it out please. :)

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     She's not exactly the most beautiful girl, but when she smiles there's at least a dim glow in the room. Her eyes don't always sparkle, but they're bright with enthusiasm. The ashy brown hair that lines her face doesn't always shine, but in the right light it shimmers.      She's shy, timid, and quiet, but depending on her company, she blossoms into a white magnolia, and then you think... wow. _______________________________________________________...
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Poetry / I Support
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We love each other for who we are, We love each other always. Our hearts are pure, intentions quiet, we wish not bother you. We don't appreciate the harangue, which denigrates our name. Though, the more you speak your words of hate, The more you boast our fame. We do not pick apart your lives, nor desecrate your names, So maybe you can take a hint, and simply do the same. We love each other for who we are, We love each other always. Our hearts are pure, intentions quiet, why do we bother you?
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / list of books
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Jailbait - Leslea Newman Green Angel & *Incantation - Alice Hoffman The Tenth Circle - Jodi Piccoult Nights in Rodanthe & *Three Weeks With My Brother - Nicholas Sparks So Yesterday - Scott Westerfeld The Giver & The Messenger - Lois Lowry Perfect World & Tomorrow, Maybe - Brian James *The Twilight series - Stephanie Meyer A Perfect Snow - Nora Martin Talk - Kathe Koja *Bless Me, Ultima - Rudolfo Anaya *Angels Watching Over Me - Michael Phillps *Rachel's Tears - Beth Nimmo & Darrell Scott *Do...
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Short Story / Heroism
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They told us to rest, that tomorrow we'd need our strength. How can I rest? I saw death. Death reached out it's hands and lunged for me, drug me down to the blood soaked ground and yanked me back up to my trembling feet. Death whispered in my ear, and flirted with my lips, ... my eyes are splintered with the blinding dark red, so unholy. My eyes are weary, my ears are deaf, I only speak to those in command, for I am wallowing in death. I am so influenced, that I myself feel morbid and gray. T...
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Right now I reside in Oklahoma, I've lived here, I've lived there. Back then I lived an urban life, Unmeasurable is what I left behind. I've lived here, I've lived there. For many reasons we came and went, Unmeasurable is what I left behind, We took leave without a warning. For many reasons we came and went, Unstable and confused, We took leave without a warning. Living the same place twice was not an option. I wish I could live on my own. Right now I reside in Oklahoma. I almost wish I could...
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Flash Fiction / Comeuppance
Too hard hitting. Maybe a story like this doesn't belong in a 100 word piece. There isn't room to question anything. A story to be in a Bathroom reader needs to make the reader ponder something. Mabye if you left out the rape part, and just mentioned that she is having sextuplets, then the reader is left to question whether she was raped or if she was simply promiscuous. Also, the third sentence is a fragment, that entire short paragraph needs to be grammatically reworded.
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Poetry / Love's Red Ocean
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Very clearly written. I personally find it a refreshing poem.
Romance / Like. I Like Him.
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Well, it's a limerick, but there's no definite rhyme scheme, and no I don't find it funny but that's just my personal opinion.