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AGE: 30
LOC: Austin, TX
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 04

Our lives are governed by laws, but my passion knows none.

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Poetry / -Sugar Winds-
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Sweet whispers flow through open pores like a breath of life given I only come once as she whispers "love life, not livin' " but one still can't understand mystery master plan unfolding, invading breathing space What is this place? sweet confusion rushes upon a man’s face caught in this nature for a second he takes a second look eternity, it must of took feelings unexpected finds him deeply affected now spiritually interconnected precarious position unyielding an awareness un...
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Poetry / -Rethink-
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It's time to rethink how we've been livin' the essence of life, beauty of sight, tasteful delights, we indulge everyday shelter, food and water yet we still complain in our beds of luxury tossing and turning wishing for better opportunities but do we ever think about those Sudanese? Could we live a second in thier shoes? As they tilt thier head to the side and reply "excuse me, what shoes??" I keep hearin' how we need to greener but Im thinkin' we need to go leaner cause our thoughts are way ...
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Poetry / -Rethink-
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It's time to rethink how we've been livin' the essence of life, beauty of sight, tasteful delights, we indulge everyday shelter, food and water yet we still complain in our beds of luxury tossing and turning wishing for better opportunities but do we ever think about those Sudanese? Could we live a second in thier shoes? As they tilt thier head to the side and reply "excuse me, what shoes??" I keep hearin' how we need to greener but Im thinkin' we to go leaner cause our thoughts are way to he...
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Forgotten Children Play on the hills of sorrow Daily struggles Hoping to see beyond tomorrow So malnourished, Oh how they suffer Flies nibble on eyelids Makes it tougher I smell somethin' rotten How they've been forgotten Why the world not stoppin'? Why these children keep knockin'? And beaucracies keep clockin' Know one answers Just proceed to discuss Forgive em' Lord, Forgotten children, resortin' to cuss By seasonal reminders they send us Bring about worries Weather forecasters Naming stor...
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Stay with in the line? stay with in the lines?? why should we stay with in the lines? staying with in the lines is like holding your breath and never letting go. Should we find solace in that the worlds welcome mat? I refuse. So let me rebel and exhale this essence of truth the coloring book holds the Fountain of Youth Revert to your days as a young child when imagination was free to run wild and it was all beautiful, no matter the result but you say we graduated to an adult so our condition ...
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Good Job on this piece. I like the tone and the rythm used; it flows very nicely.
Man...I love this quote! I may be reading too much into it however here is my take on it: To me poetry is beautiful and there are no rules or laws that are subject to it... Therefore, this quote is a metaphor of poetry - an awakening of spiritual creativity, an awarness that comes forth through spirit and not form; within yourself, which we as mankind are all capable of in the eyes of the One Creator. "but not everyone happens to be a poet" - yet most cannot or choose not to grasp this essenc...
Poetry / Links to a Chain
"but along with that came the recognition to never put anyone beneath me and roll over them as if you never noticed they were there." And thats the key my friend...very well put overall. The awarness of your self, at the same time your able to identify with others and not judge them, but be a part of them - links to a chain, whether good or bad, it helps create an understanding which will follow you always. Good stuff man, keep it up! Peace, OB
Poetry / War
Very well written...keep up the good work. I felt this piece indeed. A true reminder of the sadness of war and the despair it reaps.
Criticism / Silent Casualties
I like this one...though I must say, regardless of who sent them, they chose the path....Thus, they must accept whatever the path brings forth.
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