Can't give you a super rank, cause I don't really feel it's a blog style entry. But I completely agree with your point of view, the friend system here needs some tweaking. You have a nice way with words and clearly poetry is your native genre as you possess no meager skills. I loved it.

I like it overall, and I certainly agree with the message. The writing is sound, solid and supports your theme. It is a little repetitive towards the third paragraph..you could maybe just put the "friends with benefits" part in the second paragraph and go without the rest which is ground you've already covered and proceed to your final summation.

I tried the 55 word nanofiction thing and it's hard. This is okay. It was a little soft in the pay-off. I'm not sure if you need to alter the spoken phrase or not. It's good work anyway for such a short piece.

It's snazzy. I think people into plays and/or Shakespeare will give you the highest marks.

Pretty good. Not the best humorous threat i've ever heard, but it's in the higher percentile. I think the ya'll and ye throw it off a little.

The writing is nice, I like your word choices, but it almost reads like poetry. You seem caught between two styles here. The theme is not new, but you do some inventive things with it - the black cloud, physical yet independent "Hyde" outside of "Jekyl's" influence. I like this well enough. I think if you could lean it more toward conventional prose while still maintaining some of the poetic qualities and expand the word count to set up more of the plot and character development, you would ha...

I give you a ten for the theme. But the poetry itself...there are alot of overly familiar statements like "sea to shining sea" and "pay it forward", which I think you may be intending to saturate the piece with these for "mood", but it comes off as generic instead. Alot of the lines are simple rhymes like "fire of desire". I'm no poet, and I have no special skill set in reviewing it, but I would get rid of the simple rhymes and stale sayings. Find a new, more vigorous way to say "might makes ...

I like the mood and notion that you're going for here. I appreciate the sentiment. But, I do think it comes off as passive from a style and structure standpoint. I feel like you're trying to emulate what you feel will "sound" like chivalric prose, but it comes off distant and stuffy. You can also condense this into a smaller piece, as alot of the lines tend to echo, if not actually repeat, similar themes from one part to another. Look for more dynamic word choices as well, try to invigorate ...

Dude, cut back on the criteria. I like alot of the individual concepts here, but I had a hard time finding a way to stay on track. I think you tie the themes and concepts together fairly well, like stepping stones. But the structure and style is all over the place, at least for me, and I admit I am no poet. If you can streamline the format to something a little more consistent, I think you will see a difference. I have no skill set for modern poetry, so perhaps the use of rhyme/non-ryme shor...