There was not enough information in this "short story". I could feel the attraction in the authors words, but i am not drawn in to read his story. I felt as if though the author would tell about the "BOY" but soon ran out of words, so he would state, "Boy was a withered and battered middle-aged man with grey in his hair and beard. His wife Sylvia was exactly the same." What does he mean, exactly the same? Was she very masculine looking? What kind of characteristics made her the same, yet what...

I can feel your words, and your emotions in the last two stanzas, particularly the last "And so perhaps we are together forever after all My God! What a drag." I loved the realization in your writing. While i was reading it i could feel as if I myself was coming to such a conclusion. Then at the end "What a drag." expressed your attitude torwards your new thought. It made me rethink my thoughts on the message though out your poem, so it made me want to re-read your submittion. Great job!

Wow this piece is amazing. I literally had to re-read this to understand the consept, which to me is still forming in my mind. Your writing forces the reader to explicate this poem in their own mind. You are showing not telling, I love it! Keep writing like this and you will have more great writings!